Rush Hour

Written May 6, 2025, For Contest Sponsored by: Nette Onclaud

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Red on green traffic run,
hasty flags of pink shun
one hour before high sun.

Feel the surge of spate wind,
icy kiss grooms the rind
tiptoe through rush hour, timed.

Hexaline Form Created by Nette Onclaud: 6 lines with 6 syllables, Rhyming or not

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Kim Rodrigues

May 10, 2025 at 7:32 AM

Congrats!

Howard Kerr

May 10, 2025 at 1:12 AM

Sotto, Congratulations on your placement. Inspired use of hue and shade underpins a nuanced narrative. You crafted a vivid visual momentum allied to smooth rhythms Howard

I Am Anaya

May 7, 2025 at 9:54 PM

I felt the anxiety, and yet a sense of a professional's gliding right along as usual, and as if he were tiptoeing through the tulips. Brilliant!

Duke Beaufort

May 7, 2025 at 5:57 PM

SP, you do give me the feeling I'm in the rush and on a deadline to get wherever it is I need to be. The language and construction you use allow my imagination to run through the streets in all sorts of ways. Smiles!

Kim Rodrigues

May 7, 2025 at 12:10 PM

I feel the rush… Hugs ~ Kim

Ink Empress

May 7, 2025 at 11:22 AM

Creative rhymes and very well written on this subject dr sotto, i dont know this form and i didnt look at the contest requirement etc but i think as always youv given something that stands out amongst all! I love the ending the most in this especially “ icy kiss grooms the rind tiptoe through rush hour, timed.” Brilliant! Pleasure reading you today! Best wishes! Sending you light always