Rebecca V. Poet Rhyme

Roses Are Dead, Violets Are Wilting

Roses are red, Violets are blue,
Birds are still chirping and clouds are askew;
The sun is still shining as the flowers renew.

   Leaving me breathless reveling the view,
I leisurely watch as though I'm wanted too.

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   Roses are dry, violets are tilting,
Shadows gloom over the barren and wilting;
I sit there and watch, my happiness jilting.

   What once was so vibrant was now turned to grey,
Slowly but surely withering away.

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   Roses are dead, as violets are too,
Everything in sight now an ungodly hue;
My once a happy life was swallowed by truth.

   Wondering why after all this time I've succumb,
I silently apologized as my body went numb.

-Rebecca V.

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Carole Duet August 5, 2016 at 10:27 PM Interesting poem....

David Cathey August 3, 2016 at 5:07 PM Great poem Rebecca....David.

Skat A May 12, 2016 at 11:05 AM Hi Becca, will we See A new One from you soOON.... SKAt Rebecca V. May 13, 2016 at 11:34 PM Lol, sorry for the question marks at the end, that was an accident. I can't really revise it now so... Rebecca V. May 13, 2016 at 11:33 PM Yeah, hopefully. I've been working on one for a couple days now and should be published sometime on Monday or Tuesday. Thanks for asking ??

Anne-Lise Andresen May 11, 2016 at 12:38 PM - Hi Rebecca :) - Thanks for your first great poems, interesting and well written:) - Poems can say much or little - A poem tells me, thoughts, wishes, dreams, wisdom, happy or sad ...... deepness or powerfully - Most of all, have fun and welcome to PoetrySoup :) - // Sun :) Rebecca V. May 11, 2016 at 5:21 PM Thank you, I appreciate that!

Moon Flower May 8, 2016 at 6:44 AM That's the way to go! Congrats on your first entry and welcome to Poetry Soup, Rebecca. :) Rebecca V. May 8, 2016 at 11:03 AM Thank you :)

Eric Boddie May 7, 2016 at 7:29 PM roses are red, eric is black....well I would say pecan tan to be exact....but Rebecca's words are inspiring to all....even to the man who is 8 feet tall....because what I read inspired me so....that there is much of your writing I still want to know....nicely done ms lady....;) Rebecca V. May 8, 2016 at 11:03 AM That's really cool, I've never seen a comment that actually was a poem in response... Thank you lol :) Eric Boddie May 7, 2016 at 7:32 PM btw....I was 14 when I wrote my 1st poem just over 26 years ago....lol

Jan Allison May 7, 2016 at 6:58 PM Fabulous first poem Rebecca welcome to soup:-) hugs Jan xx Rebecca V. May 8, 2016 at 11:04 AM Thank you for all the support! :)

Poet Destroyer A May 7, 2016 at 10:55 AM rebecca, SOnice to sEE yOng talent,, Welcome to Poetry soup, I hope you enjoy the community. Here, you will find friendly poets who enjoy supporting one another. I myself, enjoy reading and commenting those who want to be read. The only time I give constructive criticism is when a poet desires it. However, if for some reason the poem is not my field I will guide you to someone who is more qualified than I. Stop by and read one of my poems if you like. My poems are not perfect, but I have a feeling you might like one. I encourage you to check out the contest page and read to receive comments. Tell me a little about your poetic skills if you like. It will be my pleasure to follow and read every poem you post from here on :) We are Lucky To Have you. Your New Poet Friend @-> LINDA <-@ Rebecca V. May 7, 2016 at 11:37 AM Thank you so much! I will be sure to check out your poems when I have the time.

Manmath Dalei May 7, 2016 at 2:18 AM Rebecaa, Nice and wonderful first entry. Welcome to poetry soup. Hope you will enjoy our community. Wish you a fruitful journey ahead.....//:) hugs Rebecca V. May 7, 2016 at 11:38 AM Thank you! :)

Brian Davey May 6, 2016 at 2:43 PM Wow you are really talented young lady you should harness this talent of yours and run with it! It may be your calling! Wonderful poem however sad it is Rebecca V. May 6, 2016 at 3:13 PM Thank you so much for your support!

Tim Smith May 6, 2016 at 12:42 PM I have to give you much kudos Rebecca. For only being 14 your grasp on writing is far beyond your years. Your rhyming is well done and thoroughly thought out. I like theme of the wilting rose and the imagery portrayed...The formatting is terrific as well...I am going to make this a favorite so I can come back to it...Welcome to PS Rebecca V. May 6, 2016 at 3:06 PM Thank you so much!

Skat A May 5, 2016 at 11:03 PM =Rebecca, nice to see another ABC form. :) I like your Silent Apology line, it is DEEP. One of the best I've read today, , Welcome to Poetry Soup. It will be a delight to read and become familiar with your poems in the future. As for now, I will greet you with the same smile others passed when I first joined the soup. Wishing you and your poetry the best. I hope you get to meet all the nice poets around here STARTING with me- SKAT :-) Please drop a hello and tell me a little about yourself if you wish. I would like to be your newest poetry soup "FRIEND" Hugs* SKAT Rebecca V. May 5, 2016 at 11:47 PM Wow, I haven't been on this site for two hours and I'm already being greeted with such kindness. I appreciate that, and I can tell this is a really nice community. When I'm older, I want to go into the field of Composition/Creative Writing and this is kind of like a practice for me. I'll be sure to check your poetry out as well! <3 ~Rebecca

Rebecca V. May 5, 2016 at 10:43 PM This is my first poem guys, sorry for the terrible formatting, I'm only 14. Age doesn't necessarily correlate with maturity, I'm just making an excuse lmao.