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Role Reversal

His hands clasped tightly, one in mine, one in mother's. Days of baby steps made us nod in encouragement -- we let go. Daddy took his first balanced steps post crash. A memory of joy, watching him walk again.
dad's first leap of hope puddles of joy held my breath-- gleaming roles reversed
June 30, 2020 A MEMORY Poetry Contest Sponsor: Line Gauthier ~Winner: 1st Place

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Date: 7/16/2020 2:51:00 AM
Congrats on your top win! A beautiful Haibun!
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Date: 7/29/2020 3:23:00 AM
Thank you for your kind wishes Krish! :)
Date: 7/14/2020 1:21:00 PM
Affecting ink! I have taken those shaky first steps post crash. Sounds like he was surrounded by love, it is palpable in your poem. Congratulations on your top win Aditi! xomo
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Date: 7/14/2020 1:45:00 PM
I can understand how you must have felt Maureen. Surely you were surrounded by lovely people. Glad you loved my muse. Thank you for your thoughtful appreciation. Much love :)
Date: 7/14/2020 3:22:00 AM
Poignant, heartwarming and just a beautiful write wrapped up in so few words. Congratulations.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:09:00 AM
I am glad you loved my muse Gary. Thank you for your kind appreciation. Blessings! :)
Date: 7/14/2020 1:01:00 AM
Wow! Congrats! I'm delighted to learn of your daughter great relationship. God bless you.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:08:00 AM
Glad you loved my muse Beata. Thanks for your kind appreciation. Blessings and love :)
Date: 7/13/2020 11:42:00 PM
I am touched. My Dad was my philosopher and guide. So many memories are preserved in my heart. Big Congrats to win TOP as usual.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:08:00 AM
Glad my words made a place in your heart Ma'am. Thank you for your generous wishes. Blessings and much love :)
Date: 7/13/2020 10:28:00 PM
As a father, I can feel the love. Congrats on your #1 placement, Aditi!
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:07:00 AM
Really happy my muse resonates with you dear friend. Thank you for your kind wishes :)
Date: 7/13/2020 10:15:00 PM
So touching and heartwarming, Aditi! Congratulations on your first place win. Sending you blessings and hugs.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:07:00 AM
Glad you love it Sam. Thank you for your wishes and blessings. Much love :)
Date: 7/13/2020 8:26:00 PM
Masterpiece!!! Dear Aditi, this poem is eternal! Any daughter will adore this subline poem. I love this! Will be a FAVE forever. Congratulations on your TOP WIN!!
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:07:00 AM
I am honoured to receive such wonderful appreciation from you my friend. Thank you for dropping by to shower your kind wishes and for the fave. Much love :)
Date: 7/13/2020 8:00:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Aditi.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:06:00 AM
Thank you Beth. Love :)
Date: 7/13/2020 5:44:00 PM
Beautiful, Aditi. Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 7/14/2020 10:05:00 AM
Thank you for your appreciation and for my placement in your contest Line. Much love :)
Date: 7/11/2020 8:53:00 AM
A truly remarkable write. Roles reversed! Happens with parents as they age! We need loving children who care! All the best in the contest!
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Date: 7/11/2020 9:01:00 AM
Thank you for visiting my muse and leaving your kind words Krish. Your appreciation means a lot. Blessings :)
Date: 7/2/2020 3:01:00 AM
This is a reminder of how we come full circle to do for our parents what they once did for us. Lovely!
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Date: 7/4/2020 2:39:00 PM
I am sure such memories always bring smiles. Thank you for appreciating Caren :)
Date: 7/2/2020 2:32:00 AM
Aditi, you have really covered a lot of ground in this short write. I was imagining myself as the father in your scenario, and feeling the amazing love and support of my daughter and wife as I struggled to teach my muscles the fundamentals of walking again. Loved the line "puddles of joy held my breath", this is sensational haibun writing. You have inspired me to think harder about this contest. Your friend, John
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Date: 7/4/2020 2:38:00 PM
This is a memory after my father's accident two years back when I saw him being vulnerable for the first time in my life. My mother and my brother helped me in letting him find his strength to walk again. It was a moment of sheer joy and I imagined how parents felt when their children walk for the first time. Thank you for your kind appreciation. I am looking forward to read your wonderful muse dear friend :)
Date: 7/1/2020 9:26:00 AM
Aditi, this is so touching--well done! Janice
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Aditi Mishra
Date: 7/1/2020 10:29:00 AM
Thank you for your kind words Janice :)