Notes About The Poem

River


The river started high in the mountain from melting snow and rain,
It flowed downhill for hundreds of miles over stones and around rocks;
Merging with streams, it became wild, meandering past green forests,
Fast flowing pristine water, foaming white water rapids, so dangerous.
        Past rugged terrain and woods lovely, dark and fathomless,
          With shorelines of foliage and fallen trees decaying;
        And in lagoons green and mossy, the river rested; waiting,
          Then surged forth, under bridges, past homes to the ocean.

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September 6, 2015

Verse

Written By Broken Wings

Concept - River

For the contest, Poem That Did Not Place And More, sponsor, Nette Onclaud

Sixth Place
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Kendrick Avatar
September 19, 2015 at 8:48 AM
Awesome work !! No wonder it is in the winners’ list. Congrats..Sara
Dietrich Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 6:20 PM
BIG congrats, I'm not sure what placement you got. Will have to go see later. Too much catching up to do right now. I am ONLINE> YAYYY but I still have no time for the soupmails. Hope you had a great day!
Haight Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:52 PM
Wonderful imagery in your river poem, Broken. Congratulations on your fine win. Hugs, Sandra
A  Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 1:31 PM
Broken, congrats on placing in Nette's awesome contest. SKAT
Onclaud Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:53 AM
flowing with such ease and beauty, constance... the foamy image lends itself to the theme on touch, and i wanted more of this sort all through the piece... thank you for joining my contest and sweet congrats!
A. Sharma Avatar
September 14, 2015 at 4:02 AM
Congrats on ur superb winning write broken! u hv an awesome way with words!
Dietrich Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 9:04 PM
Very nicely done!! I have one starting at top of mountain and going to the ocean, but it's much too long! Gosh I gotta get BUSY.
Y. Avatar
September 7, 2015 at 10:20 AM
BW, this is a well written piece. It had a nice flow. The imagery was really good. Best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis 7
Tor Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 6:58 PM
Very Nice. Love all the examples of each part of the river in its motion.
Pinet Avatar
September 6, 2015 at 4:44 PM
I like this poem ..it flows well the word choices are excellent and the theme is consistent throughout. The imagery is good and the reader can feel the experience. Emile.
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