Ritual

On both sides of drunk,
on both sides of sober,
both sides of the truth
and both sides a lie 
lie the two of us.

You own the license to my pain,
I hold the leasehold to your wounds,
we hunger for the ritual       
embedded in our souls,
fractures that won't heal.

We can't breathe but what 
we're bleeding, 
leeching out the worst 
of how we feel.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Brown Avatar
January 14, 2009 at 10:52 AM
Wow Keith I guess I have not read your writing for a long long time. This is excellent. Hope to read more soon. Thank you for all your comments.Love, Carol
Dvorkis Avatar
January 12, 2009 at 8:14 PM
I'm probably on the wrong track but I picture two heroin addicts lying on a bed. They were drunk and shooting up last night. They wake up, sober, and shoot up again. This is where the bleeding and leeching ritual comes in. If I am wrong, and I do think I am, I don't care since I still get to convey the images these words generate from my reading them, and that's what poetry is all about anyway...I think.
Mac Donald Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 7:03 PM
Oh la...life and love didn't come with a handbook, but "leeching out the worst", seems like sound advice. Maybe it's part of the healing process? Wonderfully written Keith! "Leasehold"s and "licences", permits, I suppose, attached to "the ritual". Hope all's well with you!! Love, hugs, and blessing to you and yours....Mikki
Gass Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 8:49 AM
Wow Keith! This perfectly penned write speaks directly to my heart because of my current, long standing situation. It is certainly a terrible condition for any relationship to end up in and not easy to live with feelings such as this. In fact, it really becomes more surviving each day rather than living. Insightful, awesome write! Love, Robin
Köhp Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 8:21 AM
Love this! A study in juxtaposition :D The message is universal, but the language and form is purely yours. Amazing poem! Also thank you for your very kind comments. You do so flatter me! Nathaniel
Haniff Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 7:55 AM
love your poem it is soo well expressed..thanx for the comment....peace maryam
Ginn Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 3:58 AM
So full of emotion Keith and very well expressed. Laurie
Reynolds Avatar
January 9, 2009 at 3:17 AM
Very true, duality at its best/worst - excellently expressed, a choking write. love, Kristin
Ehigiator Avatar
January 8, 2009 at 10:45 PM
Deep write...keep em coming *Tyesha
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