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Ritual

On both sides of drunk, on both sides of sober, both sides of the truth and both sides a lie lie the two of us. You own the license to my pain, I hold the leasehold to your wounds, we hunger for the ritual embedded in our souls, fractures that won't heal. We can't breathe but what we're bleeding, leeching out the worst of how we feel.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 1/14/2009 10:52:00 AM
Wow Keith I guess I have not read your writing for a long long time. This is excellent. Hope to read more soon. Thank you for all your comments.Love, Carol
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Date: 1/12/2009 8:14:00 PM
I'm probably on the wrong track but I picture two heroin addicts lying on a bed. They were drunk and shooting up last night. They wake up, sober, and shoot up again. This is where the bleeding and leeching ritual comes in. If I am wrong, and I do think I am, I don't care since I still get to convey the images these words generate from my reading them, and that's what poetry is all about anyway...I think.
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Date: 1/9/2009 7:03:00 PM
Oh la...life and love didn't come with a handbook, but "leeching out the worst", seems like sound advice. Maybe it's part of the healing process? Wonderfully written Keith! "Leasehold"s and "licences", permits, I suppose, attached to "the ritual". Hope all's well with you!! Love, hugs, and blessing to you and yours....Mikki
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Date: 1/9/2009 8:49:00 AM
Wow Keith! This perfectly penned write speaks directly to my heart because of my current, long standing situation. It is certainly a terrible condition for any relationship to end up in and not easy to live with feelings such as this. In fact, it really becomes more surviving each day rather than living. Insightful, awesome write! Love, Robin
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Date: 1/9/2009 8:21:00 AM
Love this! A study in juxtaposition :D The message is universal, but the language and form is purely yours. Amazing poem! Also thank you for your very kind comments. You do so flatter me! Nathaniel
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Date: 1/9/2009 7:55:00 AM
love your poem it is soo well expressed..thanx for the comment....peace maryam
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Date: 1/9/2009 3:58:00 AM
So full of emotion Keith and very well expressed. Laurie
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Date: 1/9/2009 3:17:00 AM
Very true, duality at its best/worst - excellently expressed, a choking write. love, Kristin
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Date: 1/8/2009 10:45:00 PM
Deep write...keep em coming *Tyesha
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