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Rising Spear of Light

rising spear of light
splits the heart of a closed sky
out tumble the stars

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Bic Gi-Sa

November 20, 2017 at 1:01 PM

So short and so wonderful!

Skat A

January 3, 2016 at 6:57 PM

Great verse

James Marshall Goff

July 9, 2010 at 9:17 PM

congrats Grace....you have a talent for conveying space...jmg

Carol Sunshine Brown

July 6, 2010 at 8:19 AM

Congratulations Grace on your win in Deborah Guzzi's contest "Fireworks". Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

July 6, 2010 at 1:04 AM

Hi Grace--I knew this would be a winner--super congrats! totally enjoyed the imagery here :) --nikko :)

Ray Dillard

July 5, 2010 at 8:35 PM

Grace, This poem made the best picture for me. Keep up the good work. RAY

Diiamond Rich

July 5, 2010 at 3:19 PM

Hello really enjoyed this poetry today and also will read more... Hope you will enjoy my poem/ story: Criminal-- part2 have a great day

Andrea Dietrich

July 5, 2010 at 1:31 PM

I just loved this one from the beginning. Congrats on your great win. LUv, Andrea

Gert W. Knop

July 5, 2010 at 11:38 AM

This is an excellent Haiku and congrats on your win in the contest, Grace!...Thank youu also for your kind comment on "Butterflies"...Have a great week...Gert

Elaine George

July 5, 2010 at 8:43 AM

Wow!!!! Love this description, Grace. Congratulations on your win. Love , Lainie

Farah Chamma

July 5, 2010 at 7:59 AM

A wonderful Haiku indeed. You paint a magnificent image in this one. =) Thank you for your lovely comments.

Steven Mossburg

July 4, 2010 at 7:22 PM

You create a very vivid picture in this well written poem. Good job!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

July 4, 2010 at 6:22 PM

Congrats Grace on your winning Haiku in the Fireworks contest with this remarkable Haiku describing the celebration today.. with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii.. AlohA..

Earle Brown

July 4, 2010 at 6:35 AM

Very nice! Best wishes

Doris Culverhouse

July 3, 2010 at 8:07 PM

pretty poem, welcome to poetry soup!!

Carolyn Devonshire

July 3, 2010 at 1:38 PM

What an original description of the firewords, Grace. The last line is amazing! Best wishes in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Canny Amah

July 3, 2010 at 9:46 AM

... a daze of the galaxy ... keep fit! Canny

Debbie Guzzi

July 3, 2010 at 5:58 AM

perfection..soft smile...if I might...perhaps you would just not put the period at the end of line 3? (and perhaps you'd give me some lessons!) Light & Love

Dr.Ram Mehta

July 3, 2010 at 4:41 AM

A nice tnry to the contest. Good luck

Sara Kendrick

July 3, 2010 at 4:17 AM

This is a winner for sure...Sad that the sky's heart would be injured but glad that out poured stars..Great write ...Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work about the old firewrorks ....I guess old fireworks are like old people their energy has just about fizzled out...Sara