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Riding Shotgun

Speeding down the highway I lament my life so far and meanwhile Death is gleeful, riding shotgun in my car. So I crank up the volume, speakers thrumming bass guitar, but Death just seems to dig it, riding shotgun in my car. One child is an addict and the other lives too far, as Death adjusts the seat-back, riding shotgun in my car. My husband's soul is breaking while his son's a big rock star, and now Death is laughing, riding shotgun in my car. As I mourn my unborn grand-kids his smile becomes bizarre, for this is Death beside me, riding shotgun in my car. Crashing at 190 sure would leave a massive scar, and meanwhile death is grinning, riding shotgun in my car. ©Danielle White

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 6/4/2010 2:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry X2 making it through the first round . I wish you the best in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/31/2010 10:35:00 AM
Congrats Danielle on both your entries making it to the first round of competition in Poetry Soup contest... way to go my friend... good luck.. luv.. Linda-Marie
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Date: 5/28/2010 7:41:00 PM
This poem made me pause and reflect for a moment. It is very moving. The image I have of the car crashing. The repeat sentence "riding shotgun in my car" is grips your soul.
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Date: 5/28/2010 6:05:00 PM
Danielle - wonderful flow in this poem - very well written piece - Congratulations on having your poetry featured this week, God Bless, mj
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Date: 5/28/2010 4:30:00 PM
This is a truly great poem with rythm and meaning. Loved it. Joyce
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Date: 5/28/2010 8:29:00 AM
Such a powerhouse poem, I remember this one, and it is not forgettable.......a haunting poem, well worth reading once more. ~ Best wishes, Carrie
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Date: 5/28/2010 3:42:00 AM
Congratulations on being featured this week. This is certainly worth the attetion. Very well done.
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Date: 5/25/2010 9:28:00 AM
Congrats Danielle on the featured write. Vince
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Date: 5/25/2010 9:17:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week. A wonderful verse, I enjoyed the read. Caryl
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Date: 5/25/2010 5:23:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Danielle. May you have many more features and may you find loads of inspiration along the way. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/24/2010 12:59:00 PM
Many congrats on your wonderful featured poem this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 5/23/2010 9:25:00 PM
Congrats Danielle on your featured poem this week on the Soup...wonderful words for sharing.. luv ..Linda-Marie..
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Date: 8/20/2009 7:41:00 AM
Oh my gosh, Danielle...I think this is the best you've written....so powerfully painful... This could be an amazing lyric, sung, bringing tears...so poignant, so soulfoul, sadly indentifiable for many people.
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Date: 8/20/2009 5:53:00 AM
Danielle, this is one of the best writes I have read today if not the best. It is sure to stay in my mind for awhile I am sure. Outstanding writing in every way. Love, Carol
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Date: 8/20/2009 4:46:00 AM
Wow this is amazing. Great work. Jodie
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Date: 8/20/2009 3:08:00 AM
this is a powerful work that kicks your teeth out then takes your wallet.you feel the powerlessness and it makes you uneasy.it puts you in the back seat with out a belt or a doggie bag.stay on it.but give me the keys.o
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