Ribcage

Split apart your ribcage, Open up the corridor, and let me come in Uneasiness instantly strikes through me Let me sway away... Let me flutter away... Like a butterfly out of its cocoon I'm trapped!Let me depart Split apart your ribcage, Unwrap me, let me go! Believe me...reflect on me Let me sway away...flutter away Let us both seek the sun, So we can grow together once more

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Jake Ponce

Date: 5/5/2014 3:14:00 AM

3rd on the list. Short but direct to the point. I don't see it being written any other way.

Hgarvey Daniel Esquire

Date: 3/12/2013 9:05:00 PM

Dear David, Congratulations Young man for this Ironic POEM "Ribcage" being a well deserved Feature I see YOU still have a little Self doubt about YOUR Flowing Pen. Be assured as Carol said if YOU have any questions You can ask any POET on the site and YOU will get answers. If the one YOU asked does not know they will refer YOU to a POET who does. I'm thinking that POETRY runs through the "Breidenthal" viensWith LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Eternal Liege...Harry

Laura Breidenthal

Date: 11/4/2012 12:38:00 AM

This is a beautiful and absolutely deep poem David. I'm not just saying that because you are my brother. It is one of my favorites. Brilliant work!! Always, Laura

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 5/26/2012 8:48:00 PM

David,;-) congratulations with your featured poem of the week... it was nice stopping by to view all the great poems, on the home page.... always... pd

Stacey Brackley

Date: 5/24/2012 2:22:00 PM

Nicely done... Stacey

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/24/2012 7:24:00 AM

Congratulations on your featured poem this week David. Love, Carol

J.W. Earnings

Date: 7/5/2010 2:29:00 PM

Thankx for the uplifting comments! Have a wonderful day (Don't worry, I have more poems) But, I'm still getting used to this website. Maybe I can show them off later. I just don't want people to copy and paste my work and publish it...It would be quite disappointing.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/3/2010 10:23:00 AM

I would like to welcome you to PoetrySoup David. Wishing you the best in your writing endeavors. If you have questions please feel free to ask anyone here. We are all willing to help and if we don't know the answer we will find someone who does. Love, Carol

Joseph Spence Sr

Date: 7/2/2010 7:15:00 AM

The essence of this poem is very intriguing. One in now trapped, and trying to find a way out could be more fun. It reminds me of Indiana Jones hysterical adventures. I like the irony. Welcome to Poetry Soup and keep writing. Great job! Joseph

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 7/1/2010 7:07:00 AM

sounds painful to be with you! LOL Welcome to poetry soup, hope you find much inspiration and your ideas flow like a raging river to inspire others.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 6/30/2010 5:40:00 PM

Welcome to Poetry Soup.. enjoyed reading your creative write tonight ..with luv from the "Sweetheart" in Hawaii on vacation...

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 6/30/2010 5:07:00 PM

enjoyed reading today, welcome to poetry soup!