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Revenge Is Not Always Sweet

People in my school have names for someone like me.
    Freak, crazy, weirdo, a spawn by the devil's decree.
        I took note of every malicious word they ever spoke,
            knowing that before long they'd no longer make me a joke.

None of them knew how truthful were their mocking words.
    They had no clue I could spread my wings to fly among the birds,
        with ravens that caw out for blood at the stroke of each midnight.
            I'd fill their haunting dreams with images of daunting fright.

A snip of dried herbs, a pinch of fungal root, boiled in fat of fowl,
    a concoction for me to savor, secreted to me by my mother, an owl.
        Eyes that see through bloodshot color, they would see them too
            when the full moon was high and the sky turned dark cobalt blue.

No help will they receive from a scream or gyrations to be free.
    They soon will know they should never have made a mockery of me.
        The time is near, my brew is cooled, now it's my time to have fun.
            Tonight their dreams will be nightmares, a gift from the evil one.

With their eyes closed, they will envision they are being chased
    by hundreds of bloodshot eyes, the likes of which they've never faced.
        Black robes adorned, scepter of wormwood waved from my hand.
            Eyes...  wild bloodshot eyes, will seek vengeance at my command.

Fog advances to the bedrooms of those who sleep in peace.
    My adrenaline is pumping, just a few more minutes until release.
        A snarl of satisfaction I feel curled upon my blood red lips.
            You won't belittle me again with your taunting nocuous quips.

NOW!  I gave the order for the eyes to creep into their dreams
    But my heart is beating too fast. This was not part of my schemes.
        I can't see a bloody thing. What's happened to the spell I cast?
            How long will this blindness torture me?  How long must it last?

A truant officer was sent to see what had become of the freak.
    Through a window he saw many ravens, all with bloodied beak.
        No body was discovered. All that remained was a robe of black
            and a note scratched upon the floor.  "Too late to take it back."



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December 26th, 2015
Deep and Dark Contest
Sponsor: Broken Wings
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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A   Avatar
January 15, 2016 at 10:06 PM
LIN LANE, congratulations on your win!!! XOX ~LINDA~
Gentry Avatar
January 13, 2016 at 1:01 AM
My goodness! Very well-written, organized, presented, excellently rhymed, deep and dark poem. Congratulations. A 7
Lane Avatar
January 13, 2016 at 3:33 AM
Thank you very much, Susan.
Kimathi Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 3:11 AM
Greetings Lin. Congrats for your placement in the contest! ;-)
Lane Avatar
January 9, 2016 at 3:22 AM
Hi, Teddy. Thank you.
A  Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 7:22 PM
Lin, Congratulations on your Deep and Dark win. **SKAT**
Inman Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 9:47 AM
Definitely deep and dark. Wonderful, flowing couplets. Reads to me like Prose Poetry, telling a great story. Really enjoyed it, Lin.
Lane Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 10:01 AM
Thank you, James. I really appreciate your compliments. ;)
Canerdy Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 7:57 AM
Excellent! This poem builds a fascinating, bone-chilling story, maintains an appealing rhyme scheme, AND conveys a strong theme. Congratulations! Janice
Lane Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 8:25 AM
Thanks a lot, Janice, for so many great comments. They are appreciated.
Tor Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 9:18 PM
Lin congratulations on your win!
Lane Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 3:21 AM
Thank you so much, Michael...nice avatar.
Roper Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 9:11 PM
Wow!! Congratulations on your win!!!!!
Lane Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 3:21 AM
Thank you very much, Eve. I felt a little evil writing this.
Haight Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 8:06 PM
Wow...very dark and so well-written Lin. Congratulations on your wonderful win! Hugs, Sandra
Lane Avatar
January 8, 2016 at 3:20 AM
I think I was scaring myself. lol Thanks, Sandra.
Sage Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 6:00 PM
Congratulations Lin
Lane Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 7:21 PM
Thank you so much, WS.
Allison Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 4:51 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Lin:-) hugs jan xx
Lane Avatar
January 7, 2016 at 7:20 PM
Thanks, Jan, and congrats to you on yours. ;) hugs
Allison Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 4:31 PM
WOW I am blown away by the vivid description and imagery in your tale - talk about deep and dark Lin this is awesome! good luck in the contest will make this a fave so I can dip into it again:-) hugs Jan xx
Allison Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 5:36 PM
I'm going to sleep with the light on lol:-) hugs Jan xx
Lane Avatar
December 26, 2015 at 5:35 PM
Did it scare ? lol Jan, thank you for liking it enough to save...hugs.
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