Revelation In the Rain

She briskly walks in January’s rain, which drums the endless rhythm of her pain, pulling closer round her shoulder in the downpour the leather jacket he so often wore. Another day like this she can remember when he had worn the jacket, and against her he’d pressed as they stood kissing in the rainfall. The world could wash away; he was her all! No storm could stop their loving as they raced with great anticipation to his place. Before they’d even reached the bedroom door, they’d flung their rain-soaked clothes along the floor. Underneath the sheets, though cold and wet, they madly kissed. He was as passionate as winter’s storm away from which they’d run, and yet he warmed her like sweet summer’s sun! ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ She‘s almost home; the rain has nearly died. She thinks of all the nights she lay and cried. While thinking how the rainstorm’s cold still lingers, inside the jacket’s pockets she moves her fingers. In the lining of one pocket, her fingers meet a crumpled piece of paper - an old receipt - its date from when, without a word, he’d left their town and in the city, by a drunk had got run down. The piece of paper gives her now a revelation- A high class jewelry store had been his destination. He’d planned to ask her very soon to be his wife. and bought a ring there on that last day of his life! His parents gave his jacket to her, yet she’d always guessed the worst for why he’d left. What happened to the ring? She cannot know. But now her tears with bitter sweetness flow. For Brian Strand's All Yours (Jan 21) Poetry Contest
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Godwin Avatar
September 26, 2025 at 6:26 PM
Oh, my gosh, the drama and the exquisite writing are both dynamic, Andrea. I LOVE IT. I didn't see 2nd section coming, within the 2nd section, I didn't see good news coming, I thought it would be an affair, and I was so happy it was not. Ew, I was invested. CayCay
Evans Avatar
January 24, 2021 at 4:38 PM
Great storytelling. Congrats on your win.
Agustin Avatar
January 23, 2021 at 3:14 AM
Wow! Congrats! God bless you.
Goldsmith Avatar
January 22, 2021 at 2:38 PM
Congratulations on your win. WOW!!! What a story/write. Enjoy your win/day/weekend with blessings..............
Blodgett Avatar
January 22, 2021 at 12:35 PM
Great storyline.......its a poem with the content of a novel someday to on film!!
Kauffman Avatar
January 22, 2021 at 10:39 AM
So pensive with such sad irony, Andrea! Well written story that flows so smoothly. Congratulations on your top win!
Rodrigues Avatar
January 22, 2021 at 9:20 AM
Wow! Congratulations well-deserved!
De Beaulieu Avatar
February 29, 2020 at 1:02 PM
Hello Andrea Dietrich, oh such a sad ending for a love with a strong bond. She will never know what happened to the ring. She is in sadness. have a nice day my friend. Hugs. Darlene
Gauthier Avatar
April 13, 2018 at 9:33 PM
What a twist - I've got goosebumps. How the plot thickens. How well you crafted this thriller, Andrea.
Sergi Avatar
October 9, 2017 at 8:20 PM
Hi Andrea: A sad down so poignantly with heart felt love and memories.
Barden Avatar
October 5, 2017 at 7:42 AM
Very melancholy and charming, Andrea, and written with superb cadence ... loved it! Blessings and congratulations on your well-deserved win, my friend - great stuff! :-)
Ashley Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 7:45 PM
Congratulations Andrea on your fine win with this captivating and emotional poem.
La France Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 1:19 PM
Andrea, a riveting and ever so sad story, congratulations on your win !
Roper Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 12:34 PM
Back to Congratulate you!
May Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 9:43 AM
A poignant write Andrea..Congrats on your win
Pandit Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 7:16 AM
Congrats Andrea!
One Avatar
October 4, 2017 at 6:53 AM
An epic write, great story telling.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
Gazbowski Avatar
April 16, 2016 at 8:51 PM
Absolutely wonderful Andrea !!! Epic it most certainly is.
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 5, 2015 at 5:45 PM
This is an epic win Andrea and a fave for me! Big congrats on your first place win! 7
Tyler Avatar
August 5, 2015 at 8:08 AM
Congrats on first place! My heart broke a little while reading this. The longing and pain is palpable in the words you wrote.
Delaney Avatar
August 4, 2015 at 2:26 PM
Congratulations on your first place win. Was this written for Giorgio's Leather Jacket Contest long ago? Just curious.
Dietrich Avatar
August 4, 2015 at 6:43 PM
yes, it was, dear, you remember correctly.
Roper Avatar
August 4, 2015 at 8:48 AM
Andrea, I love the love story but so heartbreaking a 7 and congratulations on your win. Hugs dear friend Eve
A. Sharma Avatar
August 4, 2015 at 1:18 AM
Congrats on ur awesome first place win dear Andrea!
Nunez Avatar
August 3, 2015 at 12:13 PM
Another awesome write, Andie. Congrats! hugs
Allison Avatar
August 3, 2015 at 4:08 AM
Wow wow wow Andrea - what an incredible story - and i love the bittersweet ending - a 7 and faves:-) hugs jan xx
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