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Retired melting slowly into the world spreading visibility into gleaming pools after a rain. small onyx eyed birds surround the rolling edges dip and ruffle wings, bath like Grecian goddesses in a woodland bower. Sprites and spirits watch to learn the secrets of simplicity life afforded them now the worshippers are gone.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 9/18/2017 12:27:00 AM
Reading it slowly it comes to me. This is GREAT artistry. The feelings you invoke are stupendous. Its also a match with mine Punctuated in Time. Mine was outrage, yours quietly lingers and is much more eloquent and ... it touches the inside oh so gently
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/18/2017 8:41:00 AM
Jannie I thank you for reading my poem. You are very perceptive and open to different thoughts.
Date: 9/15/2017 10:20:00 AM
wow, love the way you described this... Great descriptive lines, this is great poetry..
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/15/2017 12:09:00 PM
Hello again and thank you for your kind comment.
Date: 9/14/2017 11:21:00 PM
You see these things as they are meant to be seen. Great depiction, wish more people could see the world of nature through the same eyes. Enjoyed this poem. Regards, Craig
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/15/2017 8:18:00 AM
Thank you Craig.
Date: 9/14/2017 5:46:00 PM
Hi Patricia , this is a beautiful write very enjoyable my friend ::))) hugs
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/14/2017 6:10:00 PM
Hi sweetie how are your bones? thank you for being so encouraging for all these months.
Date: 9/14/2017 9:09:00 AM
"worshipers are gone" ... what fool seen a wise man's mind ... what bird wallows .. . lovely poem miss ...
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/14/2017 9:31:00 AM
Good morning Timothy and thank you for your support.
Date: 9/14/2017 4:26:00 AM
YES! This is so special, I really loved this awesome write my friend! I especially loved the line, "Sprites and spirits watch," that is incredibly tremendous Patricia! Your poem is quite the powerful piece, such an amazing write! Great Work!!
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Patricia Cresswell
Date: 9/14/2017 8:21:00 AM
Russell you are special. Even in your pain and discomfort you still write and comment and encourage Thank you for being so brave, I know back pain, It can be soul destroyingly insidious.

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