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Residing Spirit

Last night I dreamed, your house decayed away In that same way, your body must be now Your memory is lost in me somehow What you once were, dissolved beneath the clay Your house remained, on that the final day As your remains were lowered down below Still in your living room, your things would show Residing spirit you, in there would stay The dream I had, has turned my head around For in it came despair, I had not felt Your house and with it you were rotting down The place in which your spirit always dwelt I’m lonely now, as you are really gone Residing spirit me, must now move on [I tweaked this slightly after Andrea's wonderful advice;constructive advise is one reason I am here on Poetry Soup]

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 2/25/2010 12:30:00 PM
Great to see you tweaking, dear one!! I do it all the time when I've let some poems sit and need to renew them! Yes, that sonnet I dug up about little room, it just happened to coincide with the type of sonnet YOU had posted this week!! And of course, you know I love seeing you do a sonnet! LUv, andrea
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Date: 2/25/2010 8:50:00 AM
Enjoyed reading this..it reminds me of a past love and death...Thanks David...Enjoyed...Marty
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Date: 2/24/2010 11:06:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today David. Please keep writing and sharing with us here at PoetrySoup. Love, Carol
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Date: 2/24/2010 7:52:00 AM
Can feel the emotions!
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Date: 2/24/2010 3:56:00 AM
That is a sad thought....When the home is gone or occupied by another that is not a family member slowly the memories of that person disappear..Keep the creative pen flowingl. Thanks for the comments on my work. Sara
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Date: 2/24/2010 2:38:00 AM
The content of this poem is strong and full of inner feeling, well put together by a gifted pn, thanks for your support Daniel, hands across the sea my friend
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Date: 2/24/2010 12:24:00 AM
Nice work David.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.
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Date: 2/23/2010 8:39:00 PM
Hey David, your meter in this one is pretty good. soup mail!
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Date: 2/23/2010 6:54:00 PM
Awesome write David.. remember every ending is a new beginning.. enjoyed this very much.. spirits have their place with us too...enjoyed..luv.. "Sweetheart"
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Date: 2/23/2010 6:24:00 PM
Very sad poem. Adventualy every one moves on . Enjoyed reading your poem tonight..i.t.
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