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Residing Spirit

Last night I dreamed, your house decayed away
In that same way, your body must be now
Your memory is lost in me somehow
What you once were, dissolved beneath the clay
Your house remained, on that the final day
As your remains were lowered down below
Still in your living room, your things would show
Residing spirit you, in there would stay

The dream I had, has turned my head around
For in it came despair, I had not felt
Your house and with it you were rotting down
The place in which your spirit always dwelt
I’m lonely now, as you are really gone
Residing spirit me, must now move on




[I tweaked this slightly after Andrea's wonderful advice;constructive advise is one reason
I am here on Poetry Soup]
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Dietrich Avatar
February 25, 2010 at 12:30 PM
Great to see you tweaking, dear one!! I do it all the time when I've let some poems sit and need to renew them! Yes, that sonnet I dug up about little room, it just happened to coincide with the type of sonnet YOU had posted this week!! And of course, you know I love seeing you do a sonnet! LUv, andrea
Owens Avatar
February 25, 2010 at 8:50 AM
Enjoyed reading this..it reminds me of a past love and death...Thanks David...Enjoyed...Marty
Brown Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 11:06 AM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today David. Please keep writing and sharing with us here at PoetrySoup. Love, Carol
Palli Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 7:52 AM
Can feel the emotions!
Kendrick Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 3:56 AM
That is a sad thought....When the home is gone or occupied by another that is not a family member slowly the memories of that person disappear..Keep the creative pen flowingl. Thanks for the comments on my work. Sara
Cheeseman Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 2:38 AM
The content of this poem is strong and full of inner feeling, well put together by a gifted pn, thanks for your support Daniel, hands across the sea my friend
Strand Avatar
February 24, 2010 at 12:24 AM
Nice work David.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.
Dietrich Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 8:39 PM
Hey David, your meter in this one is pretty good. soup mail!
Sweetheart Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 6:54 PM
Awesome write David.. remember every ending is a new beginning.. enjoyed this very much.. spirits have their place with us too...enjoyed..luv.. "Sweetheart"
A  Avatar
February 23, 2010 at 6:24 PM
Very sad poem. Adventualy every one moves on . Enjoyed reading your poem tonight..i.t.
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