Relatively Speaking

To see old relatives can get you thinking
if your health will also soon be sinking.
Will you get their shingles, bunions or bad knees?
Will you get dementia or need some surgeries?
And if afflicted, will you face it well or will you cave?
Or might you be the lucky one to go
 "relatively" pain-free. . . to the grave?
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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A   Avatar
May 29, 2014 at 6:11 PM
ANDREA,,, Double Congrats on Carolyn’s birthday contest. Many smiles, on its future feature in her birthday booklet. XOX~ Linda
Haick Avatar
May 29, 2014 at 4:29 PM
Congratulations on a fine win! Well done and I love the optimism in the last line...but who can know what the years will bring?? Great job!
Callus Avatar
May 27, 2014 at 11:03 AM
Great write, Andrea. Food for thought, indeed!! Congrats on a deserved win! // paul
Mehta Avatar
May 27, 2014 at 5:42 AM
Congratulations on your fine win, Andrea
A. Sharma Avatar
May 27, 2014 at 5:41 AM
Andrea u really know what to write when,, simply great ! loved this one ,,congrats on huge win !
A  Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 8:42 PM
Andrea, Congratulations, in Carolyn's "Birthday and Aging Humor" contest. Love ~SKAT~
Johnson Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 7:18 PM
Congratulations o your win, Andrea. Very nice. Love,Joyce
Lindley Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 7:08 PM
A fine win my friend...bravo!! and big congrats..
Devonshire Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 4:41 PM
Dear Andrea, A very clever poem. The first four lines of this poem are featured in the birthday booklet. Congratulations on your win and thanks for participating in a contest to wish some special ladies happy birthday. Love, Carolyn
Poet Avatar
February 24, 2011 at 11:40 AM
A new form to me.How many people go pain-free to the Grave Andrea?
Tideswell Avatar
July 16, 2010 at 5:35 AM
I'm not familiar with this form Andrea but I do like this one, clever play on words. Of course it doesn't have to be 'old' relatives that get you thinking. I watched my aunt (& one of my best friends) succumb to the ravages of leukaemia. It was so hard to witness, but she made us all so proud. She certainly didn't cave but when the end was inevitable, she accepted it with such dignity and grace. I only hope I could follow her example if I had to, though I'd prefer the pain free route ;) - Sharon
Muzzey Avatar
July 13, 2010 at 8:52 AM
An awsome Grook, I enjoyed the write. Good luck in the contest. Caryl
Brumley Avatar
July 13, 2010 at 5:53 AM
This is one of those writes that gets you thinking! I see life kinda like a river, the source or lake in the mountains is God, the water itself is life and we are the fish swimming against a current of pain. Most fish find the eddies and the pools where the current is weak, but the brave fight the current to get back to the source because there is no current there. Just the cool clear placid water of life in infinite abundance.
Sweetheart Avatar
July 12, 2010 at 7:54 PM
Brilliant my friend.. a cookin' Grook..haha.. enjoyed your rhyme scheme too.. and good luck in Charles's contest with this one.. its sure to place in the top ten.. with luv..
K. Avatar
July 11, 2010 at 11:41 PM
Haha, I think I do ask myself this one too-- scary how cancer is so strong in my mom's side though...and lol very nice, pain free to the grave, I'm not sure I'd want to be that pain-free haha-- you sure did well with you grook-- I don't even know how to start mine! --wish you the best in the contest! -- hugs nikko :)
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July 11, 2010 at 7:05 PM
Awesome, Andrea. Really like the irony of going "pain free to the grave." Very well done grook! Best wishes for the contest. Love, Carolyn
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July 11, 2010 at 2:05 PM
hm, this is interesting. what about your elders andrea? do you know if you will suffer from what they have when you get to your older age. too late!just kidding.(: i know for a fact that i will have bad knees. ~Always
A   Avatar
July 11, 2010 at 11:14 AM
hello Andrea, nice poem. Good luck in the contest once again you got mail again,..p.d.
Austin Avatar
July 11, 2010 at 10:39 AM
You have only half begun to cover my old-age problems. Every day I see people 10,even 20 years younger than myself listed in the obituaries. I am simply too cantankerous and rotten to go to an early grave, pain-free. How you been? I like your humor. Love, Dave
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July 11, 2010 at 9:14 AM
Tru and visionary, Andrea! Already have some minor health problems, but one never knows what will com!!! Wish you a nice week and best of luck for the contest!...Love, Gert
Mehta Avatar
July 11, 2010 at 5:48 AM
Very witty and sarcastic write. Good luck in the contest, Andrea
Neels Avatar
July 10, 2010 at 10:24 PM
Your grook sure made me think of the eldery people at our Seniors Club, seeing how they have changed over the years Andrea.. Very thought provoking, luv wilma best wishes for the contest
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