Sandra Haight Poet Couplet

Regretting Cake

And there it stood, tall as can be,
in fluffy layers, more than three, 
a beauty to behold with cream
and rows of pudding in between.

Our gracious host gave each a slice,
a vision of pure paradise!
So moist and light, and my first bite
seemed quite okay...but then my plight!

I swallowed...heard her say with glee,
no calories in this you see,
sweet aspartame in every crumb,
the pudding, cream...but, overcome,

I ran off to the bathroom there...
my throat was burning, and I swear
what looked so great on the outside
went down like insect pesticide!

This nasty jolt made me adore
regretting cake for evermore!


Sandra M. Haight

~7th Place~
Premiere Contest: Regretting Cake
Sponsor: Julia Ward
Judged: 08/14/2016

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Wendy Rycroft August 15, 2016 at 1:46 AM Congrats on your win Sandra x

Joseph May August 14, 2016 at 9:17 PM Congrats on a fine win Sandra....

Kim Rodrigues August 14, 2016 at 3:18 PM A caketastropy! Loved it! Sandra Haight August 14, 2016 at 8:34 PM Thank you very much, Kim. Hugs, Sandra

Beautiful Scars August 14, 2016 at 2:51 PM Sandra! lol! congrats lady on your placement! :)-luloo Sandra Haight August 14, 2016 at 8:34 PM Thank you so much, Laura. Hugs, Sandra

Tom Arnone August 14, 2016 at 2:36 PM Congrats, Sandra -- another floury tale of woe. ;-) P.S. Though I now use Stevia, Aspartame is actually not that harmful. See: http://www.healthline.com/health/aspartame-side-effects#Overview1 Sandra Haight August 14, 2016 at 8:37 PM Thank you, Tom, for your visit and congrats! I detect the bad taste in all artificial sweeteners, so I don't use them. Guess that's what inspired my poem! I will check out your link regarding Aspartame. Thanks again, Sandra

Connie Marcum Wong August 8, 2016 at 7:51 PM You have the most creative mind of most anyone here Sandra. This is a brilliant entry! 7 ; ) Sandra Haight August 8, 2016 at 8:11 PM Ha Ha, thank you, Connie. This was a difficult theme to figure what to write. I had to remove my first write from the contest because Julia did not like my referring to 'diabetic'. So, I came up with this. I appreciate your encouraging remarks! Hugs, Sandra

Daniel Turner August 8, 2016 at 6:37 PM I HEAR YOU! That aspartame is nasty stuff. I love the humor in this poem Mrs Sandra. I had blackberry cobbler and ice cream last night. YUMMM with 3 m's, Sandra Haight August 8, 2016 at 8:12 PM Yes, Daniel, nasty indeed. Thank you so much for your encouragement and that you thought it humorous. I hope Julia thinks so too! Sandra