Regrettable Roommate

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A good example for my "VIEWS FOR POEMS" Poetry Contest

Goodluck.

Unhealthy human body, fighting its owner, in need of a Goldsmith
months of hygiene malpractice, now counting as the sixth,
his blanket of microflora possesses a morgue beneath
weeks without touching water, despite the pretense quite stealth
one, five, seven, nine; already getting umpteenth.
From 03:18am to 20:16 hours; the evidence of my anger’s width
awful smell, recites loud acrostics from low esteem teeth
and the rate of hang-over vomitus, beats any myth,
last month was 89; already 83, ten days later, is this filth
my mathematics can’t be wrong, rent expires on the fifteenth.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/28/2020 2:16:00 PM

thanks for the model for your contest, Funom. I don't suppose we need to use the form that the originally viewed poem was part of (since I see you did yours as rhyme and not acrostic like the original you used it from). I hope you get some great entries!