Nette Onclaud Poet Rhyme

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Regaining Self Through Betrayal

On this night, bleak reminisces grip
               My heart   and on my pores…these sorrows bring,
Pained deceit--- lies hiding a false worship
Of affection that plays me like a string
                                As he wanders on, trysts beneath June’s rain--
      That I , naïve, yearn for musk’s charm again
          For this quest dares my ego    oh  how vain --   
      A woman enmeshed in barbs of  summer- fire
          Believing kisses could enchant moon’s lyre,
                                While thrilled zest quickens sweet passion’s desire :
Yet, I’m not the one and only… woes rip
            These bleeding veins, the laughter that can’t sing…
      Firmly, self- esteem hoists   to regain
            His amends nulled ~     lifting my worth…higher.


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Posted 12/2/2018
Fragmented Rhyme--November 2018 Writing Challenge
Sponsor: Dear Heart

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Bobby May December 12, 2018 at 2:11 PM Your words blend together with such smooth harmony and very nice with a clear point! Loved it my friend!

Deb Radke December 4, 2018 at 12:36 PM And congratulations, as well for your winning placement. Deb

Deb Radke December 4, 2018 at 12:35 PM This is truth in naked clarity. Heartbreaking, honest and longing as it recognizes the reality of life. So beautiful. Best wishes. Deb

Constance La France December 3, 2018 at 4:28 PM Nette, congratulations on your win in my contest. I understand that you had technical difficulties with the indention that you were unable to fix but still your poem was so beautifully written I had to place it in my contest, well done sweet Nette

Arthur Vaso December 2, 2018 at 9:53 PM I sure hope this is only poem! You are too beautiful to be taken for granted!

Eve Roper December 2, 2018 at 8:38 PM Nette, enjoyed reading this well descriptive and well written poem that arouses strong emotions because of its beauty. Good luck in the contest.

Arturo Michael December 2, 2018 at 2:40 PM Those days were important too...discovering emotions, exploring feelings...a little bit tricky...things get mixed up...lies and deceit becomes considerations of interactions...Lovely write...on a subject many faced, face and will face...All the best nette...

Tom Cunningham December 2, 2018 at 2:19 PM Such a talent you have Nette, so well written. Tom.

Paul Callus December 2, 2018 at 2:16 PM Hi Nette...this fragmented rhyme challenge has not been easy to translate into poetry, but you have managed it with apparent ease. Past the stage of naivety there is realization and a stronger willed woman! Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen December 2, 2018 at 1:54 PM - "lies hiding a false worship ...." ... an excellent writing, Nette - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit December 2, 2018 at 1:03 PM I like the upbeat tone towards the end Firmly, self- esteem hoists to regain. Superbly done artistic piece, nette. Best for a win.

Mystic Rose Rose December 2, 2018 at 12:23 PM sometimes another can bring us to the pits of hell or the heights of heaven, Its self esteem that counts most in times like these, I enjoyed your poem today Nette. thank you for sharing your talent, and your time. This is comment Sunday, could you please leave a few extra comments on site today to help raise the community spirit, it would be most appreciated

Heidi Sands December 2, 2018 at 12:13 PM You stepped up to this challenge with a well written, expressive, poem Nette! Good luck in the contest :)