Sasha Maharaj Poet Dodoitsu

Red Sun

Blazing red sun over the horizon, 

Rising silently in the Far East.

Splashing beautiful colours across the sky,

Awakening Passion inside me.









CONTEST: RED SUN

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John Posey June 24, 2013 at 7:04 PM Nice imagery, my friend.... Jake Sasha Maharaj July 1, 2013 at 2:50 AM Many Thanks John :)

Kash Poet June 24, 2013 at 6:31 AM Beautiful picture you have penned here.Just check the syllable scheme of a Dodoitsu.I am afraid your poem has problem with syllable count. Sasha Maharaj June 24, 2013 at 6:40 AM Many Thanks Mr Kash.... yes i have done that and also viewed examples and noticed that the syllable count was almost similar to mine. i could be wrong though. but thank you so much for the encouragement

Abdulhafeez Oyewole June 24, 2013 at 3:01 AM You've penned it well Sasha. Well done and good luck. AO Sasha Maharaj June 24, 2013 at 3:05 AM Thank You so much :)

David De La Croes June 24, 2013 at 12:50 AM I love your colourful interpretation of the red sun and its effect on you, Sasha. Best of luck in the competition... David Sasha Maharaj June 24, 2013 at 3:04 AM Many Thanks.. Was just a try.... First time writing this style :)