Kelly Deschler Poet Iambic Pentameter

Red Roses Fade To Black

Red velvet petals, only I, seduce,
With hidden danger under the disguise,
My fingers feeling shyly, I reduce,
Thorns sharpen, ready, waiting the unwise.

Before me, bleeding poison, I assume,
This flower withered, shriveled the entire,
A dark extracted substance, the perfume,
No beauty, only sorrow, I admire.

Withdrawn I wept lamenting the depart,
A rosebud, crimson, youthful, I erased,
A lifeless flower, never I impart,
nor taken with affection, I embraced.







Written by Kelly Deschler  October 23rd, 2014

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Susan Ashley June 27, 2019 at 9:01 PM I admire the sad beauty and rhymes of this dark rhythmic poem, Kelly. Brilliant artistry. Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Kelly Deschler July 25, 2019 at 9:06 PM Thank you for your kind comments and congrats Susan... I appreciate them very much :)

Line Gauthier June 24, 2019 at 10:49 PM Poignant imagery, Kelly. Congrats. Kelly Deschler July 12, 2019 at 3:49 PM Thank you so much for your kind comment Line :)

Funom Makama February 16, 2015 at 12:37 PM This is beautiful and nicely crafted. Thanks for the share... Sometimes its refreshing visiting old poems of soupers... Its amazing, the freshness which comes from doing this... And that is exactly my enjoyment visiting this piece Kelly Deschler February 22, 2015 at 12:14 AM I also enjoy going back and revisiting the older poems. I always find some that I may have missed before. I'm so glad you liked this one, Funom. Thank you so much for your kind words!

Andrea Dietrich November 20, 2014 at 10:44 PM a great title for this sad one, kelly. BIG congrats on your win.

Kayod5 Kayode November 18, 2014 at 9:58 AM I love your style Kelly..."I seduce... I reduce...I assume... I admire...I erased...I impart...I embrace." What a great emphasis you made with the Repetition of "I" here (good stress) and went ahead to decorate it with the rhyme; you are just too much, congrats on the win. Kelly Deschler November 23, 2014 at 8:31 PM I'm happy that you love my style of writing, Kayode. Thank you for your wonderful comments. They really meant so much to me!

Brenda Meier-Hans November 17, 2014 at 10:17 AM Congratulations on your win Kelly. Kelly Deschler November 21, 2014 at 12:45 AM Thank you very much, Brenda.

Jan Allison November 17, 2014 at 1:31 AM very dark imagery - many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx Kelly Deschler November 20, 2014 at 12:10 AM Thank you for the kind congrats, Jan. I appreciate it! Hugs :)

Dr.Ram Mehta November 8, 2014 at 5:59 AM Impressive write, Kelly, congrats on the win Kelly Deschler November 12, 2014 at 12:40 AM Thank you, Dr. Ram. Your comments meant a lot to me!

Brenda Meier-Hans November 6, 2014 at 9:34 PM Congratulations on your win with this beautiful rhyming poem.

Isaiah Zerbst November 1, 2014 at 10:14 PM Beautiful, beautiful rhymes, Kelly! I also am very impressed with the iamb beat. I am rather partial to metrical poetry as you likely know. Kelly Deschler November 5, 2014 at 11:14 PM Thank you so much! Yes, I do know that about you, Isaiah, and I am so glad you've enjoyed this one. I did receive some help from Giorgio to get the form just right.

Nette Onclaud October 29, 2014 at 7:09 PM I'm so taken by this creative expression of a dark rose...i go wow, Kelly.. huggs Kelly Deschler November 5, 2014 at 5:29 PM Thank you so much, Nette. Those kind words really meant a lot coming from you! Hugs :)

Paul Callus October 25, 2014 at 2:48 PM Excellent, Kelly! Even the most beautiful roses lose their fragrance and wither, eventually. Who will take notice of them once they no longer attract by their youthful beauty! {I had a ghost poem - Shivers - ready to post for your contest, but bad weather disrupted my internet for about 30hrs and by the time I was back on air the contest had closed!} // paul Kelly Deschler November 2, 2014 at 9:21 PM I think there will always be someone to love them, even after their beauty has faded away.... Paul, you've truly understood the message that I wanted to send in this poem. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments!

Justin Bordner October 24, 2014 at 8:38 PM This marvelous poem has such a surreal, ambuscading, and illuminating persona...its as ifthe rose laments its fame and classic beauty and desires to punish the hastened grip and kiss of the ignorant who dare violate her..."A dark extracted substance, the perfume, no beauty only sorrow I admire..." deep enchantment...and a FAV. Kelly...J.A.B. Kelly Deschler October 31, 2014 at 1:13 AM Beauty can bring you everything that you want in life, but it can also bring the unwanted.... I loved your interpretation of my poem, Justin. Thank you so much for your wonderful comments, as always. I do appreciate the fav!

Daver Austin October 24, 2014 at 10:20 AM A dark opus indeed. I find myself breathing carefully. Good stuff, Kelly. Love, daver Kelly Deschler October 31, 2014 at 12:48 AM It is so amazing when someone can feel the same emotion that I tried to put into these words.... Thank you for your great comments, Daver. I appreciate it very much!

Honestly J.T. October 24, 2014 at 10:14 AM You've done a good job with this (7) -JT Kelly Deschler October 30, 2014 at 2:01 AM Thank you very much, JT!

Maurice Yvonne October 23, 2014 at 4:02 PM Love the story drawn from imagery and drenched in emotional weight. I commend your execution of this complex form. Kelly Deschler October 30, 2014 at 1:19 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments. I'm glad you enjoyed this dark poem, Maurice... Writing in this form is not an easy thing to do, and I am still in the learning process.

Liam Mcdaid October 23, 2014 at 2:39 PM golden beautifully penned kelly Kelly Deschler October 29, 2014 at 1:32 AM Thank you for your kind words, Liam. I appreciate them so much, my friend!