Red Ink

Burning man syndrome diagnosed quite rare

  A life drowned by a sea of intense pain

    Without warning walking unable to bear

       Red ink covering soles with red-hot coals

     Yesterday's dreams cremated with goals
        
   Specialist to specialist to Mayo...

Praying for strength and miracle repair


August 22  2018


Rhyme Time 6 - Verses of Metaphors Contest
By Laura Loo
Red Ink
Rhyme ABACCDA
Second Place


*Erythromelalgia is a rare progressive neurovascular condition that most commonly affects the feet, but may also occur in the hands, face, or other parts of the body. The term neurovascular means that both nerves and blood vessels are involved. It is characterized by intense, burning pain of affected extremities, severe redness (erythema), and increased skin temperature that may be episodic or almost continuous in nature. Etiology is unknown; symptomatic treatment only; no cure. Typically affects both sides of the body (bilateral), may sometimes involve only one side (unilateral). Triggering or worsening of symptoms with exposure to heat (heat intolerance) or exercise and relief with cooling. The disease course may be extremely variable from case to case. For more info go to www.erythromealgia.org

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Date: 9/12/2018 9:54:00 PM
A painful read, Susan. But an excellent write. Belated congrats on your well deserved placement in the contest...Charlie
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Date: 9/11/2018 6:07:00 AM
so very sad when I read this, intense and poignant...great rhythm and rhyme all around sweet Susan...Thank you for your participation and congrats on your placement..-luloo
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Date: 8/31/2018 3:20:00 PM
Wow, such a vivid picture of pain and the struggle to find relief, love the 'coals/goals' lines, best of luck in the contest!
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Date: 8/26/2018 6:28:00 PM
Intriguing, informative, incredible ink here, Susan. Excellent! Best wishes, Gershon
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/27/2018 4:17:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 8/25/2018 8:49:00 PM
You've got the metaphors covered with this deep, short yet concise poem loaded with meaning! Good luck in the contest and all else. Poetry hugs ... CayCay
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/26/2018 1:27:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 8/24/2018 4:17:00 AM
Wonderful write, Susan!
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/25/2018 4:46:00 AM
Thank you.
Date: 8/23/2018 7:22:00 AM
This was not only informative but a fantastic piece of writing. Bravo my friend, this was great.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/25/2018 4:46:00 AM
Thank you, Chris.
Date: 8/23/2018 7:14:00 AM
A touching poem, Susan. Well penned.
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/25/2018 4:45:00 AM
Thanks.
Date: 8/23/2018 7:11:00 AM
Wow. First to the incredible poem, then to your description of this painful horrifying condition. My best to you in the contest! xomo
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Susan Gentry
Date: 8/25/2018 4:45:00 AM
Thank you, Maureen.
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