Reckoning

Unspoken words hang in the stillness of unmindful space,
  like a touch never to be felt
    A sight never to be seen
      A curl of smoke dissipating
         

A twist of faith has broken both wings
    Deeming, thrusting, unfeeling
      For those who can no longer cry 
           Or fly


A die is cast, rolling against time 
    Crushing, Shattering, Smashing
         A fate and destiny
            That would never be


The once welcoming arms are now closed (forever shall be)
     Faith has run its course (it was false after all)
        All that remains are tears, 
             That would never dry


A hollowness dwells within, 
  Siezing, Grasping, Clutching
    All rationale and sane thinking
       Hurling, Heaving, Tossing
         
           EVERYTHING 
                Into a void of sorrow


OH YES, a hollowness dwells within 
  Painful, Numbing, Dreary and Stark
     Warping, Bending, Blighting

        HURTING,  DIStorTING, C o N t O r T i N g,    FakinG
        
           What LIFE should BE
                   It all happened 





  when you left me

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I may have overdone my Gerunds. Do tell me people. TY.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008



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Date: 10/24/2008 10:15:00 PM
pricks the emotionas alright- another goody great choice of words!
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Date: 10/13/2008 9:36:00 PM
This is a very intence write.I personally felt every word you wrote. Thank you also for your comment on my poem.
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Date: 9/30/2008 10:30:00 AM
hiya, i quite liked this poem, it is writen with class. and thanks for feed back on my poem too, best wishes from diane
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Date: 9/29/2008 7:56:00 AM
Wow! What a passionate poem -remarkable and enchanting -very stylish. Thanks for your beautiful comments on my Haiku.
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Date: 9/28/2008 8:55:00 PM
This is excellent, you really got me with the last line! I can't imagine anything overdone-it all fits so well! and thank you for your generous comments on my poems also! Trudy
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Date: 9/28/2008 6:45:00 PM
George.. thank you for your comment on my poem "I am truly blessed" of course, I will never stop although the power of it will always be awesome to me.. your poetry is so much fun to read.. you do not fear words .. that is obvious.. what an inspiration you are... Constance
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Date: 9/28/2008 3:36:00 PM
WOW this was beautiful, it's piece of art! I loved every word, it flowed so effortlessly and was well crafted to perfection. This is an amazing piece, don't change a thing! Thanks for your comment on my piece, Blessings ~Michaela~
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Date: 9/28/2008 12:35:00 PM
Oh my goodness you are an artist, I am in awe with my firt piece read, you twist words and paint them by distorting their own letters, how effing wonderful!!!! Last line in this piece ties it together in it's own simplicity, one breathes it out slowly and it dances to fall at the very end, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful and nothing less... love.jmm.
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Date: 9/25/2008 5:04:00 AM
Wow. Very emotional, deep and introspective write. Can feel your profound pain. Exceptional. Love, Shar
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Date: 9/24/2008 6:10:00 PM
Definitely fits the title. Broken where it needs to be.Paving the road to hell
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Date: 9/22/2008 6:07:00 AM
In this case, George, (sorry I haven't read you before) I'd say the gerunds keep the piece rocking, floating, punching. Great write! I know the "Hollow" feeling. Love, Daver
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Date: 9/21/2008 4:54:00 PM
Kapatid, just don't forget to choose the form, yun lang :) everything is in place, a great piece. Teri ~Quezon City girl~
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Date: 9/21/2008 2:44:00 PM
what a beautiful and thought-provoking write, and like the way the words flowed together, a cry that can never be heard wow truly deep, and thanks for your comments, take care D-nyce
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Date: 9/21/2008 8:19:00 AM
Very well written, deep introspection and filled with emotion. Very well done. Regards Heidie
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Date: 9/21/2008 8:17:00 AM
This is really a great poem - I don't think you overdone anything except perhaps the level of excellence for this poem is excellence itself - Very well written and great expression of thought - You took me there - Great job & God Bless
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