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Reality Check

What should I say to describe this empty feeling, like I'm missing something I could call Home. How would I come to deny a thought revealing, given time and place, I'd invent my own. A time spent in a state of agonizing pain, A place of worship I would not forgive. Only the mind undoes the past through vision gained, in boundless timeless Love it all but lives.

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/14/2009 8:34:00 AM

I enjoyed reading this Quatrian. I know that empty feeling from missing home and also from missing someone. I have also had insights from past experience to help me become a better person. Sara

Sue Mason

Date: 7/11/2009 6:15:00 PM

Beautiful reality here, Yoni. This "mind" that often seems not mine but a Universal truth tapped in ... smile ... love this write!! Its going on my favorite list so I can read it again ... smile ...

Veronica Joseph

Date: 7/8/2009 12:51:00 PM

this is exceptional, for love is the grace of god that helps us accept the past to move forward, and yes, we all carry that empty place, that longing for home....until you are there. I am awed by your talent.

John Freeman

Date: 7/5/2009 10:13:00 AM

Your poem here is very interesting. The first verse, the empty feeling, is the mind's lack of understanding, the higher being, of Love that you are. Your heavenly home is the higher state, your sacred heart in which love your true self resides. The empty feeling is caused, by your natural mind, lost from the love that you really are. Elaborate on your understanding of the elder, serpent and the mind. Sincerely Love, from jm

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/3/2009 8:43:00 PM

Mail shortly, Yoni.

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 7/1/2009 3:36:00 PM

This means a great deal to me, Yoni. The feelings you describe are those I am experiencing as I look back and wonder where I went wrong. Sometimes the mind can be our enemy; perhaps we have a tendency to over analyze, but when we are feeling empty, that seems like the only thing to do. The "agonizing pain" does lift though, and it is this belief that I cling to when I feel like all is lost. I like your "vision" in this work! Love you, Carolyn

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/1/2009 2:01:00 PM

"it all but lives?" does it live? I have been feeling maudlin too friend but the electricity of the storm stirred me! Light & Love

Date: 7/1/2009 8:09:00 AM

Much to think about in this poem. Nice use of rhyme. Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Have a good day! Karen

Sandra Hudson

Date: 6/30/2009 7:23:00 PM

Okay, this is supreme, to the mac daddy!- where did you get this bling bling wealth of wisdom? :))-AA

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 6/30/2009 4:23:00 AM

Home is where we live and love--and i love this reality check we all pass through every now and then--an empty feeling living in a cold big house instead in a little warm home--love the last two verses--the mind is the key to forgetting the past to live a bright future----wonderful your writes my new friend---charma

Sajdah Al-Riyami

Date: 6/30/2009 3:22:00 AM

Brilliant!Good luck in the contest=)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 6/30/2009 3:15:00 AM

Yoni, I enjoyed slowly absorbing this fine poem! thanks! Jim

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 6/29/2009 10:29:00 PM

You definitely have a deepness in your work. Thought provoking lessons within your words. Keep writing. Lovingly, Dane