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Reaching Out

my mind feels cornered again every thought has me hanging on sanity's edge i reach for you this ringing in my head offers little hope as it echoes through the phone a momentary pause before the pre-recorded voice the usual message after the tone as the tone of mood changes i can feel my emotions fall like shadows on lonely walls my air is heavy like these blades that press steel force against my flesh a drop of blood trickles down pulsating to the tune of my heart's beat darkness draws its line between life and death and feeds my thoughts death dances at my door and i can feel its cold press as it cuts through me again like a blade's edge steel-force my version of the poem Leave a message after the beep by Just That Archaic Poet

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Kelly Deschler

Date: 11/13/2013 4:29:00 PM

I love the suspenseful feeling in these words. Your version of his poem was amazing, Sandra! Congratulations on your well deserved win!...Thank you for the kind congrats on my poem. I appreciate it very much! :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/13/2013 8:08:00 PM

thank you Kelly...hugs :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/12/2013 11:32:00 PM

Sandra, for me this is one of the best in the entire contest. Congrats. I am honored to be placed near you in the list!

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/13/2013 8:08:00 PM

thank you Andrea :) hugs

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 11/12/2013 5:46:00 PM

Beautifully written.Congrats on your superb win in this contest.Great work ,friend....

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/12/2013 7:32:00 PM

thank you my sweet friend...hugs :)

Karen Anglesey

Date: 11/12/2013 12:26:00 PM

Hi Sandra, I am delighted to be placed in a contest along side your stunning work. I usually try to pick out a favorite line that stands out; in this one, they all do. Captivating~ congrats on your well deserved win :)

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/12/2013 7:31:00 PM

I am honored to be placed alongside of yours and i knew yours was a winner when i read it... i will be over to congratulate you in a moment :) hugs

Joseph May

Date: 11/12/2013 10:50:00 AM

congrats on a fine win Sandra

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/12/2013 7:30:00 PM

thank you Joseph :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 11/12/2013 8:11:00 AM

Kind of like getting a on hold message when calling the suicide hot line. I so appreciate your poetic artistry Sandra. Congratulations.

Sandra Adams
Date: 11/12/2013 7:25:00 PM

Thank you so much Richard...i think in his original he was calling a friend and got voicemail instead of them.. hugs :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/26/2013 11:46:00 AM

is this a collaboration Sandra, if so please point out his and your part... I'm only curious... I'll be back to check and see if you replied... hugs.. LINDA

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/26/2013 1:13:00 PM

no Linda, not a collaboration, his contest wants you to take one of his poems and rework it into your own piece...his pome was titled leave a message after the beep and this was my take on his poem~ Thank you....hugs Sandy

Kelly Deschler

Date: 10/23/2013 5:42:00 PM

A very dark, suspenseful, and foreboding poem. I liked it very much! Terrific work! I wish you the best of luck in the contest!

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/26/2013 1:14:00 PM

Thank you Kelly...hugs :) hope your weekend is great!

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/20/2013 3:29:00 PM

stopping by to ask if you are working on something new, sandra.... stay fine..:) huggs

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/20/2013 6:32:00 PM

i was working on a new poem...days have been busy, muse has been hushed...got one up though...thanks for stopping by...hugs :)

Joseph May

Date: 10/20/2013 5:13:00 AM

nicely penned Sandra....I did one called Call optons which is similar to this......thanks for stopping by...

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/20/2013 6:34:00 PM

thank you Joseph will have to check it out...was it a remake of Just That Archaic Poet's poem as well?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/19/2013 11:14:00 PM

just stopping by to say hi, didn't see any new poems. dang it.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/20/2013 6:33:00 PM

lol...wrote 3 in two days and then the muse got quiet for a few days...too much going on to think i suppose... ...hello and hugs :)

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/19/2013 7:52:00 PM

This was powerfully your own, even if taken by the sponsor's work.....you have made it your own. Beautifully crafted!!

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/20/2013 6:35:00 PM

thank you Carrie...i had felt an instant connection with his piece and the words came easy! hugs :)

Ken Carroll

Date: 10/19/2013 4:43:00 PM

Hi Sandra, Enjoyable dark night of the soul write..Well done.. Ken

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 10/18/2013 8:14:00 AM

Dark and effective piece. You are so very talented and create significant imagery.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/18/2013 9:08:00 PM

thank you Richard for your kind words :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/17/2013 7:52:00 PM

WOW, you are so amazing. He is going to flip for this one. He is getting so many good poems, I am now wanting to have people do this for MY next contest but using my own poems. Hmmm, don't know if I should do it or not. I might look too much like a copy cat.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 8:43:00 PM

thank you Andrea...i took one of his free verse poems because i figured it would spark my muse...it is a fun contest...hugs :)

John Posey

Date: 10/17/2013 11:27:00 AM

Great response!! You are an artist with pen and ink.... Love your style and thoroughly enjoy your posts.... Love and hugs.... Jake

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 8:42:00 PM

thank you for your visit and comment.... hugs :)

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/16/2013 4:36:00 PM

wow amazing beautiful piece

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:11:00 AM

thank you liam :) hugs

Harry Horsman

Date: 10/16/2013 3:47:00 PM

very powerful poem is this Sandra,,,

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:11:00 AM

thank you Harry...hugs :)

Lisa Mccall

Date: 10/15/2013 4:58:00 PM

Really deep! Nice poem

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:12:00 AM

thank you very much Lisa :)

Tim Ryerson

Date: 10/15/2013 3:09:00 PM

Lordy me Sandra, this is troubling, mesmerizing and absolutely beautiful all rolled into one...Haven't read the original but you sure nailed it! And the winner is...

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:13:00 AM

thank you Tim....I tried to get inside the poet's head to feel what they felt to write this one :) hugs

Nette Onclaud

Date: 10/15/2013 2:59:00 PM

hauntingly delivered in a semi-abstract tone, sandra.. it flows like a thought hitting rocks and coming down the hillside, bruised.. well-penned!..:) huggs

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:14:00 AM

thank you Nette....I could feel the desperation behind the poet's words as I read the original...hugs :)

Christine Phillips

Date: 10/15/2013 12:41:00 AM

Nice poem. I like the contrast that you have made with the ringing in your head and the actual phone itself. They blend quite well.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:15:00 AM

thank you Christine :) hugs

Michael Ainsley

Date: 10/14/2013 11:02:00 PM

I have danced with darkness myself Sandra so its hard to say good poem without saying I hope you are beyond this sadness now. I am going to look for a happy poem in your collection before I go.

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/17/2013 10:15:00 AM

thank you Michael...It was a remake on another's poets poem :) hugs

Liam Mcdaid

Date: 10/14/2013 4:21:00 PM

dazzling beautiful piece

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/14/2013 4:24:00 PM

thank you so much my friend :) hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/14/2013 1:41:00 PM

.....beeep.... a sad poem....beeep :*(

Sandra Adams
Date: 10/14/2013 4:24:00 PM

thank you...I chose a sad one from the poet to rework, so I had to put myself in that mine frame... hugs :)