Susan Ashley Poet Pantoum

Rapture

Sacred sheen swaddles soul made of serene,
soul sun-lit, lifts sinless, into saints midst;
eternal, everlasting evergreen,
essence exits Earth’s exist; white-light kissed.

Soul sun-lit, lifts sinless into saint's midst,
guardian’s wings whispering soul above;
essence exits Earth’s exist white-light kissed,
blue blessing petals dressing soul with love.

Guardian's wings whispering soul above
where fragrant is God. Pure frankincense awed
blue blessing petals dressing soul with love,
spirit freed from seedpod no longer flawed.

Where fragrant is God pure frankincense awed,
eternal, everlasting evergreen,
spirit freed from seedpod, no longer flawed;
sacred - sheen swaddles soul made of serene.


SusanAshley
August 14, 2017

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Paul Callus March 11, 2018 at 8:32 AM On reading this poem yet again, I realize how fitting the title to it is, Susan. I also confirm my impression that you give profound thought to everything that you write. ~ Hope you're having a lovely weekend, my friend. Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley March 12, 2018 at 4:58 PM Oh how you have made my day, dear Paul, with your sincere kindness and wonderful friendship! Thank you for your twice-as-nice return visit to this poem that is so close to my heart. I relish your beautiful comments that mean so much to me coming from you You continue to inspire me, my friend, and YOU are truly appreciated :)) Warmest wishes always.. ~ Susan

Silent One December 21, 2017 at 12:17 PM Wow... what an amazing pantoum.. it is a difficult form in itself but to include alliteration is a sign of your poetic talent... Susan Ashley December 21, 2017 at 8:06 PM Silent One, your presence brings me joy and warms my heart on this cold and potentially snowy evening. Thank you for spending some time with this older (very special to me) write, and for your beautiful comments and your wonderful kindness, my friend. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Arturo Michael December 14, 2017 at 8:49 AM Yes..." freed from seedpod no longer flawed." Nice line... A different feel...A lovely feel... Have a lovely day Susan... All the best to you Susan Ashley December 14, 2017 at 5:51 PM My dear friend Arturo, your presence is always such a joy. Thank you for your beautiful comment and your wonderful visit, it gave me a sunny lift in my day. I hope all is well and that you had a lovely day. My work schedule has been hectic so I've not been on as much these days. I miss reading you and I miss writing, my muse is exhausted, poor girl lol!..things will get back on track soon :) Warmest wishes mon ami ~Susan

Paul Callus December 3, 2017 at 5:03 AM If I understand this correctly you are here referring to the resurrection, Susan, a special moment in time when humans and their creator come face to face...an eternal reunion. Many think of it with apprehension, but you make it sound beautiful, something to look forward to. ~ A very good Pantoum sprinkled with alliteration and smooth rhyme. ~ Warm regards // paul Susan Ashley December 3, 2017 at 11:31 AM Paul, you do indeed understand this correctly. This is how envision this moment to be and it was inspired by a dream I had of my beloved Mom who departed this world too soon. The blue blessing petals refer to the Virgin Mary (my Mom's beloved spiritual figure) and her assisting angels.Thank you for your wonderful friendship and your special insight. You brighten my poetry with your warmth and joy! Warmest wishes.~Susan

Maria Williams November 9, 2017 at 3:26 AM Well if the challenge was to describe Rapture , Susan, and the job was to be given to you , then it was given to the right person. How wonderfully well you have crafted this poem. Another form that you excel in. Bravo....Maria xxx Susan Ashley November 9, 2017 at 7:38 PM Maria, your beautiful comment warms my heart and puts a smile on my face. Thank you for your appreciation expressed for my poetry. Your kind words inspire me and your sincerity fills my heart with gratitude. I appreciate you dear friend! ~Susan

Derek Noble Ayi October 9, 2017 at 9:46 AM Wow. This is a great piece. A difficult style but you made it so well to bring out the message about what we should expect in the last days. God bless you . You have done so well. Keep it up. Susan Ashley October 9, 2017 at 9:55 AM Thank you so much Derek for your visit and wonderful comment. It pleases me immensely to know that you enjoyed my poem and I so appreciate your time and kind and encouraging words. God bless you as well friend!

Alexis Y. September 6, 2017 at 11:36 PM Hi Susan, I really enjoy the Pantoum form. You did it justice in this well written and spiritual write. It had such a good flow and rhythm. And a great message that shows your heart for God. Excellent job:-) Alexis Susan Ashley September 7, 2017 at 12:10 PM Hi Alexis, thank you so much for your wonderful and thoughtful comment. I love and enjoy the Pantoum form as you can see lol! Much appreciation for you visit and kind words my friend :) Susan

Vijay Pandit August 17, 2017 at 11:35 AM Love the flow and rhythm--a wonderful weaving of words! Susan Ashley August 17, 2017 at 8:33 PM Hi Vijay, thank you for your encouraging comments and I'm so happy you like my poem. Much appreciation for your visit :)

Sean Kibble August 16, 2017 at 6:51 AM Never wrote a Pantoum - Seems like a complex form to write - yet you write with such elegance and great alliteration. Susan Ashley August 16, 2017 at 7:05 PM Thank you Poet O for your kind words. I so appreciate your time in reading and commenting on my poem. I bet you would write great Pantoums. You should give it a try! :)

Eve Roper August 15, 2017 at 2:01 AM Very well done , Susan, great theme, perfect Pantoum form with great good flow, and rhyme. Susan Ashley August 15, 2017 at 8:26 PM Eve, thank you so much for your thoughtful and wonderful comment, much appreciation!

Lewis Raynes August 14, 2017 at 10:45 PM This is such a relaxing read Susan, a great write. Susan Ashley August 14, 2017 at 10:56 PM Hi Lewis, I so appreciate your visit and your wonderfully kind comment. Many thanks :)

Justin Clason August 14, 2017 at 10:26 PM Great alliteration, and i think I'll give this form a try... after I read a few more of yours for study, you are very good at it. Susan Ashley August 14, 2017 at 10:38 PM Thank you Justin for reading my poem and for the wonderful comment. I so appreciate your visit. I look forward to seeing a poem from you in pantoum! :)

Corwin Donovan August 14, 2017 at 10:07 PM Beautiful. Absolutely beautiful. Susan Ashley August 14, 2017 at 10:13 PM Thank you so much Corwin! I wasn't sure about this one but it was inspired by a dream I had so I had to see it through. I'm happy that you enjoyed my poem!

Akkina Downing August 14, 2017 at 9:01 PM You're such an amazing poet Susan. I know this style is difficult for me but you're like a flowing stream, just streaming it down smoothly :) fantabulous work dear Susan... hugs :) Susan Ashley August 14, 2017 at 9:04 PM Awe Akkina, your comments are so special and genuine, you just put a heartfelt smile on my face! Thank you so much for your soulful comment and for my smile... hugs to you girl :)