Rapture

He held his wife’s beautiful body In rapture they danced under the moon Never had he felt more alive Sitting alone in his Care Home room

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Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/29/2024 9:00:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your "Rapture" write. I wish you would write more.... Have a wonderful day writing away....................

Deb M
Date: 3/3/2024 9:22:00 AM

Aww Paula ….what a nice thing to say… Thankyou dear friend! Debx

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 2/27/2024 7:41:00 PM

Beautiful and sad. Thank God for memories, beautiful moments relived in the treasure trove of one's heart.

Deb M
Date: 3/3/2024 9:23:00 AM

Lovely to see you B.J! Thankyou….Debx

Christopher Grieves

Date: 2/27/2024 7:10:00 PM

This is a lovely thing, Debx :'-) Blessings Cx

Deb M
Date: 3/3/2024 9:22:00 AM

Thankyou so much Chris! Appreciate that…..Debx

Bill Baker

Date: 2/19/2024 9:16:00 PM

A truly touching poem, Deb. Thank God for sweet memories to those that have little else to hold onto. Well written poem, my sweet friend. A FAV for my list. I hope many will think about those they know that are in this situation. Your Texas buddy, Bill

Deb M
Date: 3/3/2024 9:21:00 AM

A fav thanks Bill thats very special honestly! Debx

Terry Flood

Date: 2/14/2024 3:20:00 PM

That last line was like a sock on the jaw - in a good (great) way, of course. I guess the ability to revel in such reverie is why they say, “It’s better to have loved and lost….” A lovely arrangement of just 26 words, Deb. Terry

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:22:00 AM

You counted my words lm impressed Terry! Ha….thankyou my Funny friend! Debx

Christina Bowring

Date: 2/14/2024 10:45:00 AM

This is so touching dear, sweet Deb. Arr - we didn’t expect that last line! So love reading your heartfelt poetry because it really comes from your kind, loving heart. It’s so ‘real’, almost tangible but beautiful at the same time and always reaches out to the blessed readers. What a sweetheart you are. Happy Valentine’s Day lovely friend. Smiles and cuddles to you xx :)

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:21:00 AM

Thankyou Christina for such a gracious comment! Debx

Anne E Sangster - K

Date: 2/13/2024 6:15:00 AM

A very touching and heartfelt poem Deb! Both beautiful and a little sad too. Hope all is well with you? Hugs, Anne xox

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:20:00 AM

Hi Anne….all good for me my friend! Lovely to see you! Debx

Mike Gentile

Date: 2/13/2024 4:31:00 AM

Such poetic pathos at play here Deb! So very much is conveyed in a few lines! So poignantly beautiful! Excellent write!

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:20:00 AM

Thanks Mike….Debx

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 2/12/2024 7:53:00 PM

Well done sister Deb. Your last line took me by surprise.

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:19:00 AM

Thankyou dear Jerry! Debx

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/12/2024 7:07:00 PM

Dearest Deb, Your poem hit me hard. The simplicity yet profound emotion behind those lines is breathtaking. It's like feeling the essence of love and longing in just a few words. You captured the beauty of a moment and the ache of its absence with such grace. Keep pouring your heart into your words, Deb. They're touching souls. - Blessings, Daniel

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:19:00 AM

You are too kind Daniel…..Thankyou! Debx

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/12/2024 6:49:00 PM

Ha, ha. I was not prepared for that last line. ~ Can't get my sex on -- I mean, my sox. Tee-hee

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:18:00 AM

Ha thanks BB….Debx

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 2/11/2024 3:28:00 PM

such poignancy in just a few words. Your poem touched my heart. Well done, Deb!

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:18:00 AM

Thanks Sara…..Debx

Vijay Pandit

Date: 2/11/2024 6:04:00 AM

So sad, yet so beautiful! Memories of beloved last forever tendering comfort.

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:17:00 AM

Thanks Vijay….Debx

Hiya Sharma

Date: 2/11/2024 5:34:00 AM

Gosh, that last line speaks volumes!! What an incredibly profound and breathtaking poem thie is, beautiful Deb..You've conveyed immense depth within just four lines and this is the true beauty of poetry..It moves like vivid layers one after other and then in the end, leaves an thoughtful impact on the reader's soul.."In rapture they danced under the moon" Wonderfully crafted! It's always such a pleasure to read your words..Sending you many best wishes and light, keep shining and writing always.

Deb M
Date: 2/18/2024 12:17:00 AM

Thankyou for such a lovely comment Hiya! Debx