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Random Thoughts Hs

little high with drinks the mind spins with delusions sees many visions two headed shadows from two adjacent lamp posts lose destinations three deer on the trail show their grace and elegance quickly disappear migratory geese settle over fields in night eagles are asleep my visions are bit clear now its time to move on for now May.8.2023 Haiku Sonnet Poetry Contest Sponsor- Joanna Daniel

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Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/13/2023 3:17:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win in the Haiku/Sonnet contest, Jay - hugs

Joanna Daniel

Date: 6/13/2023 1:45:00 AM

Good writing, Jay, though not completely about nature:)

Triny Xiang

Date: 5/9/2023 8:11:00 AM

Wonderful extended haiku. Very well-written somnambulatory imagery while a little high. I was wondering if this is the chosen title and what "hs" means. Perhaps "hora somni". If the haiku is to be connected, is the fourth the final cap to your poem? I would like to hear more of your double vision on the 1st. I think yours pass the mustard with eagle's wings.

Valsa George

Date: 5/8/2023 8:14:00 PM

Lovely set of haikus! Your first trial has shown that you can be a master in this. All the best dear poet friend.