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Random Thoughts *45* Rough Draft

Love like you've never loved before Reaching your hand out to a closed door Thinking I knew what was in store Now I'm suffering, my heart bleeding on the floor _____________________________________________________________________________________________ In the club dancing, alone on the wall posted up chillin' , drunk, trying not to fall Not a care at all, I feel seven feet tall. Influenced by the alcohol, stimulated by the beats No matter the intoxication I methodically move my feet, Pelvic thrusting is how I greet This beauty who smells so sweet. _____________________________________________________________________________________________ Look, This is for everyone who has met their soul mate only to find out that their search is far from over.. Is their such a person, can one satisfy enough to to maintain love? Sometimes skeletons rise from hibernation and those skeletons become loves' Achilles heal... Stealing what hope was their, leaving you alone, left posted on the wall... In the club trying to yet again fall... Jared Pickett 8/28/09 Asavvy1

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Date: 3/30/2010 10:29:00 AM
Hey Jared, This is "the S---" man! Listen, my SM doesn't always work..but I'd like to collaborate on a piece with you..You decide on the theme..maybe do half and I'll do the other half?? Let me know what you think, k?...I'm asking Audrey to post this comment for me...Later, Jimmy
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Date: 3/6/2010 7:52:00 AM
Interesting draft this is, Jared! Keep writing and thank you for your comments...Gert
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Date: 3/1/2010 10:12:00 PM
Really interesting thoughts!
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Date: 3/1/2010 9:23:00 PM
Oh yes! I like all the words... glad I can still stir your juices to create this "hottie".. the flow still grows and glows... can I make this a fav..since its a rough draft?.. Oh yes! luv.. "Sweetheart"... both up late on the same wave length.. hhhmmmmmmmm....
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Date: 3/1/2010 11:30:00 AM
Jared love is a tough word to believe in,but somewhere there ,is that kind of beautiful love for everyone..For some it may take months to find love,others years,others may never find it all.In the end its destiny I guess,destiny and 'Will 'to make it work till the end..this is my thought of course..Jar,I love the title'Rough draft'..great poem..Charma
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Date: 3/1/2010 10:41:00 AM
Interesting write about searching for love and it not working out. Sometimes we are Lookin' for love in all the wrong places..searching for love with too many faces..hopin' to find my one and lover...Keep the creative pen flowing. Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work. Sara
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