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Random Thoughts *11* a Freestyle Rhyme

My heaven is in your eyes.
the eyes don't lie.
You cannot disguise
how you feel inside
You are my pride
soon you'll be my wife.
There may be mental strife
within the duration of our life.
my sharp, witty tongue slices like a knife.

I must confess
I've loved for a lot less
Stressed but blessed
you've dug deeper than the rest.


Jared Pickett	
9/10/09	
Asavvy1

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 9/21/2009 8:06:00 PM
Very Good Declaration of Your Love... Straightforward and Beautiful MoonBee
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Date: 9/13/2009 6:51:00 PM
An excellent poem Jared, good lines placed together in such a special way, Good read, My friend! Sincerely Moses
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Date: 9/11/2009 2:06:00 PM
"my sharp, witty tongue slices like a knife" great line, your free verse is remarkable...Raul
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Date: 9/10/2009 6:42:00 PM
loved this fine write! Jared!...jim
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Date: 9/10/2009 11:48:00 AM
AMAZING POEM Jared!
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