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Rainy Night Spills

When rainfall spills on crystal night, 
The damp brick halls and lamps' soft light
Make me slip-slide though I’m alone 
Into  the lanes of cobblestone, 
Allowing free movement  on flight.

How droplets tap while hours invite
A prance, a waltz as splash grips tight
This  child-like play  down to the bone
When rainfall spills.

How pewter cloudscape with its height
Gushes thrills of romp which excite
Hips’ wiggling sway ; an eve outshone  
By  pleasure  rare  I call my own...
Till moonglow blinks  oh drenched in white
When rainfall spills.



Form R- Contest of Broken Wings
Theme: Rainy    6/29/2017

Copyright © Nette Onclaud | Year Posted 2017

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Funom Makama Date: 7/19/2017 1:54:00 PM You just unzipped the covers of my mind to the unprecedented worship of your adorable lines with a powerful choice of words that can't just be ignored. Showers of your wisdom is well palpated in this page and the only thing I can say is a big WELL DONE! Can't wait to have more of your mental command flowing through my reading mind. Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/17/2017 4:19:00 PM Awesome write, Nette, and using one of my favorite forms, the rondeau. You really livened up the theme of rain. Congrats in the contest. Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 7/16/2017 2:19:00 PM Congrats on your win Nette Login to Reply

Kai Michael Neumann Date: 7/16/2017 2:08:00 AM 'Into the lanes of cobblestone, that is a fantastic metaphor. Congratulations, Kai Login to Reply

Joanna Daniel Date: 7/3/2017 1:31:00 AM I love this one, Nette and that picture is just so apt for your beautiful dancing rondeau:) Login to Reply

Winged Warrior Date: 6/29/2017 9:04:00 PM A beautiful verse in the rain...I love it when it rains...and to read or write at the same time...or cry lol...god bless...^WW^ Login to Reply

Eve Roper Date: 6/29/2017 8:47:00 PM this is amazing, Nette, a winning write ~* Login to Reply

Demetrios Trifiatis Date: 6/29/2017 2:46:00 PM This makes someone feels like dancing in the rain dear, Nette! Excellently written my friend. Hugs! Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 6/29/2017 5:05:00 AM - It sounds like a completely different rain than we have in Norway :))) - Beautiful written - GL in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply

Frederic Parker Date: 6/28/2017 8:16:00 PM the exhilaration, the dance, the rain, all felt in this poetic verse filled with joy Login to Reply

Joseph May Date: 6/28/2017 7:40:00 PM Your poem dances with drizzling delight... Login to Reply

Akkina Downing Date: 6/28/2017 7:31:00 PM This remind me of when I was a kid. Running about under the rain and making splash in the puddles. Lol! So fun and beautiful, Miss nette :) Login to Reply

Daniel Turner Date: 6/28/2017 6:46:00 PM This poem is simply fun:) A romp in the rain never sounded more beautiful, nette:) I love romping in the rain. lol Login to Reply

Jan Allison Date: 6/28/2017 5:32:00 PM your words are dancing off the page Nette Its a shame you cant call it rain dance lol:-) hugs Jan xx Login to Reply

Chris Green Date: 6/28/2017 5:00:00 PM Such a beautiful poetic offering Nette. Absolutely wonderful. Best wishes in the contest Login to Reply

Heidi Sands Date: 6/28/2017 4:46:00 PM This is so nice to read Nette :) Good luck in the contest :) Login to Reply