Rains of Fortitude

Tear charged riders Above the sea Born and chosen, To rise and clean Air, and water Our hills and valleys. They help filter UV rays streams From brazing earth That all receives The sun's power To hold it burn free. Tear charged riders Raised by light beams For earth, like father Joined by breezes, Dancing mother That life we may breathe. Hands together Might that is feared Teams of silver Their fate quite sealed As they're propelled Death, in drops of tears. Tear charged riders Above the sea Your sacrifice, A price quite dear For salvation That all, may know peace. By CarolineCécile Copyright © 06.14.11

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Gert W. Knop

Date: 6/25/2011 10:56:00 AM

Great metaphoric write, Caroline! All the best and coming back to my poem, "Sad Cypress" came into my mind when I remembered Agatha Christies novel...Alles Gute!...Gert:)

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/23/2011 6:43:00 AM

Alot of thought and green went into this nature and soul write, Caroline. Well done

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/18/2011 6:15:00 PM

a very interesting one, Caroline. Great metaphor!

James Foulk

Date: 6/16/2011 12:50:00 PM

a great piece you wrote, thank you for commenting on Warm Breezes.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/16/2011 12:29:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comments on my poetry. It is always a pleasure to read your wonderful poetry Caroline. Love, Carol

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/16/2011 8:57:00 AM

What a very interesting and unique way to describe rain, Caroline -- enjoyed reading this :D

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/15/2011 7:02:00 AM

Thank you for sharing your poetry Caroline. I enjoyed reading it this lovely morning. Wishing you joy and sunshine in your life that you might find inspiration to carry on with your writing. Love, Carol

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 6/14/2011 11:52:00 AM

Love your description of the "tear-charged riders" that move above the sea. What would we do without rain? Appreciate the way you describe their tears as a "sacrifice...for salvation." Very inspiring, Caroline. Gert has been struggling with arm-related problems. He's hoping for good news when he gets his MRT results June 20. I have my MRI on Thursday. Love and blessings, Carolyn

Cory Long

Date: 6/14/2011 11:46:00 AM

this was awesome with some great visuals. cory

Diane Locksley

Date: 6/14/2011 11:32:00 AM

You created a great image of stormclouds over the ocean Caroline. Whenever I read your poetry I know I'm in for a special treat. This is so beautiful. Best to you, Diane