Joanna Daniel Poet Pantoum

Rainless Clouds

Rainless clouds are drifting by
As I stand in solitude,
There in the dark deep grey sky,
They mirror my somber mood; 

As I stand in solitude,
Sunless clouds are feeling dry,
They mirror my somber mood,
As they go past with a sigh;

Sunless clouds are feeling dry,
And they are doing no good,
As they go past with a sigh,
Leaving me alone to brood;

And they are doing no good,
There in the dark deep grey sky,
Leaving me alone to brood,
Rainless clouds are drifting by.

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John Michaels August 18, 2017 at 10:55 AM Lovely example of the form, Jo. Has a definitely depth and sadness to it... hope the clouds soon part to bathe you in Sol's light! Regards, John.

Alfred Berggren July 4, 2017 at 10:58 AM Great poem with a nice picture to go with it. Your trying rain-less clouds with your somber mood hits the right note.

Gregory Richard Barden June 24, 2017 at 3:23 PM I love this, Jo - lyrical and mysterious pantoum ... such beauty in its dark tresses ... LOVELY! A fav for sure!

Afzal Nusker June 17, 2017 at 12:25 PM Sad but fabulous poem. You did so well with this form, Jo.

Andrea Dietrich June 4, 2017 at 5:26 PM what a great pantoum poem, Jo. You did it very well. I really enjoy the form and you showed us how to do a good one.

Nette Onclaud June 4, 2017 at 3:51 PM what a languid song that makes my heart quiver.. very sullenly beautiful, jo.. huggs

Nette Onclaud June 4, 2017 at 3:49 PM what a mellow, poignant song that makes my heart quiver.. very beautiful, jo.. huggs

Paul Callus June 4, 2017 at 10:29 AM Darkness and solitude can easily put us in a somber mood, Jo! Your rainless clouds have served their purpose...even without water, a lovely poem has sprouted! Regards // paul

Jan Allison June 4, 2017 at 6:37 AM So deep dark and dramatic Jo - days like this can make us feel down I love the sad imagery you have used... lets hope for brighter days ahead:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong June 4, 2017 at 3:57 AM Brava Jo! This form can read so tedious and boring if it is not done right. That is why I never write them. : ) You didn't excellent job on this. 7

Debbie Duncan June 3, 2017 at 2:24 PM Like the way yo wrote this. 7 and more. I know they took the scoring away. Thanks for reading my " YOU" :)

Heidi Sands June 3, 2017 at 8:05 AM I understand . It is another gray, overcast morning here. I hope you see the sun soon :)