John Gondolf Poet Triolet

Rain-Drenched Hair

As rain-drenched hair fell down her face
by tombstone where she sadly stood,
the storm clouds dark, time stopped in place
as rain-drenched hair fell down her face.
Her daughter gone without a trace;
why suicide?  Not understood
as rain-drenched hair fell down her face
by tombstone where she sadly stood.


April 9, 2019
Contest: Writing Challenge 1 - April 2019
Sponsor: Dear Heart

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Sara Kendrick April 25, 2019 at 6:44 AM I have read your creative winning work and wanted to say congrats on your win ..Way to go.. Sara John Gondolf April 25, 2019 at 6:51 AM Thank you so much, Sara, I appreciate it. John

Constance La France April 23, 2019 at 10:58 AM John, congratulations on your win in my contest with this sadly beautiful write, you captured the pain perfectly ! John Gondolf April 23, 2019 at 11:09 AM Thank you, Constance, I appreciate it, and thank you for hosting the contest. John

Brandy Nicole April 21, 2019 at 8:46 PM Congratulations John, on this win. Your thoughts touch my heart. ~ Brandy John Gondolf April 24, 2019 at 4:22 AM Thank you my dear friend.

Richard Lamoureux April 15, 2019 at 8:31 AM I enjoyed the use of repetition. John Gondolf April 16, 2019 at 5:50 PM Thanks, Richard, I appreciate it, John

Jennifer Proxenos April 10, 2019 at 12:17 PM One of my husbands nieces committed suicide - to this day no one knows why - a 16 year old lovely young girl. Very sad. Poetry hugs, Jennifer. John Gondolf April 11, 2019 at 4:41 AM Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Jenn, I appreciate i. John

Brandy Nicole April 9, 2019 at 9:51 PM I can feel your heart in every word. These emotions of sadness and pain. When someone ends their life, it affects everyone around them. This is beautiful and tender, all at the same time. ~ Brandy John Gondolf April 10, 2019 at 4:16 AM Thank you for your thoughts, Brandy. It is so hard to understand the reasons why a young person would decide to end their life and you’re right, it does affect everyone around them. Such a tragedy.

Heidi Sands April 9, 2019 at 4:34 PM Powerfully sad. Well written :) John Gondolf April 9, 2019 at 4:40 PM Thank you, Heidi, I appreciate you. John

Connie Marcum Wong April 9, 2019 at 2:06 PM I can only imagine how painful it would be to lose a child to suicide. Parents tend to blame themselves when that happens and they never get over it. Your poem conveys that pain so poignantly John. I am sure to see this high on her winner's list. Have a lovely Easter my friend. : ) xxoo John Gondolf April 9, 2019 at 4:34 PM Thanks, Connie. This subject has been lingering with me lately, I have a good client and friend whose 20 year old son took his life a couple weeks ago. I try to put myself in their shoes but I just can't imagine pain and sorrow they are going through right now. I hope their faith and resolve is enough to get them past this. Happy Easter to you as well my friend. John

Nette Onclaud April 9, 2019 at 1:04 PM john, riveting spin on the theme... lovely work which creates a mysterious puzzle....huggs John Gondolf April 9, 2019 at 4:37 PM Thanks so much, Nette, I appreciate you and your thoughts. Hugs, John

Kurt Ravidas April 9, 2019 at 8:50 AM Wow, triolet! A very, very rare guest in the modern poetry. John Gondolf April 9, 2019 at 6:02 PM Thanks, Kurt. I enjoy writing a good Triolet every once in a while. John