Rainbow

Rainbow Rain turns into mist sunshine peeking through the clouds prism paints the sky As this is my first attempt at haiku, Any input would be greatly appreciated. Thanks, RG

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/24/2011 1:19:00 PM

Robin ;-) CONGRATULATIONS!! on your poem being featured this week, hope your enjoying your Easter Sunday. Take care and have a nice one,..p.d

Janette Fisher

Date: 4/24/2011 11:41:00 AM

Many congrats on your feature this week Rgds Janette

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/19/2011 11:52:00 AM

Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Robin. Love, Carol

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 4/19/2011 7:42:00 AM

I think it is wonderful...beautiful imagery...Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Robin. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/18/2011 12:26:00 PM

Congratulation onyour poem being featured this week, Robin

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 9/16/2009 8:09:00 PM

loverly ! kalidascope! Light & Love

Juliane Thomas

Date: 11/27/2008 4:23:00 PM

Beautiful haiku with lovely imagery. Keep writing!

Nigel Fawcett

Date: 11/25/2008 12:06:00 AM

You're a natural, Robin. Great Haiku that is full of imagery and atmosphere. Love, Nigel

Date: 11/24/2008 1:40:00 PM

Nice use of imagery and personification in this poem. It is an uplifting piece. Thank you for sharing it with us and for your kind words regarding my poem. I am glad you are enjoying The Soup. Karen

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 11/21/2008 6:28:00 AM

This is superb Robin! Perfect form and flow... the 'p' alliterations are most effective and your language is sublime... Best wishes, Keith

Maryam Jameela Haniff

Date: 11/20/2008 3:52:00 PM

great first time trial. its like a professional's

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 11/20/2008 3:04:00 AM

This is a great first attempt - well done, I can see it all now. :) also, the modern haiku need not be a strict 5/7/5, it can be anyway as long as it does not go over 17 syllables. :) Kristin

Raul Moreno

Date: 11/20/2008 12:53:00 AM

Robin, you are a natural at this, nice 5-7-5 flow. I enjoyed it, great imagery. You painted a lovely picture with a few amount of words. You are as good as the Japanese Masters of haiku Buson, Basho, Issa, and Shiki.