Rain, the Story

in the midst of a lush meadow
there stands an impressive sight
a slip of a girl on a giant white horse
poised on the verge of flight

poetic in their beauty
they begin to move
and they appear as one
from head to back to hoove

you can see the giant beast
respond to invisible cues
as he begins to accelerate
to a place just out of view

you begin to sense the urgency
as the pair picks up speed
and you watch the desperation
as she pushes the giant steed

faster, just a lil faster
and it will be all right
all the sorrow of reality
is lost in the midst of flight

just a little harder
we're almost at the end
and the beast gives her everything
on him she can depend

the vision on that meadow
is enough to make a soul ache
watching a free spirit
and her horse make their escape

gradually they slow
his coat glistening in the sun
she leans in and hugs him
and thanks him for the run

looking into his deep brown eyes
she whispers her gratitude
stroking his white mane
they begin to walk on cue

slowly they walk the meadow
as desperation evaporates
leaving bewitched bystanders
in awe at the look upon her face

the frantic pace lost
by the run upon her beast
sorrow left in their dust
upon his back she finds her peace

they stop again and she strokes him
with all her aching heart
and knows he's her freedom
protecting her from the start

he nuzzles her soft cheek
as if he understands
and wants her to know
he's home beneath those hands

swiftly as she mounts him
agile and with grace
they begin to walk the meadow 
looks of peace upon their faces

as they reach the meadows edge
they begin to fade from sight
the girl on her magnificent white steed
disappearing in the night

written by: Lori Thomson
contest: Rain, The Story
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010


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Date: 1/16/2011 7:49:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the contest, Lori! Always, Annalise
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Date: 1/14/2011 9:23:00 AM
Congratulations Lori on your win in A Rambling Poet's contest "Rain,The Story". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/13/2011 4:13:00 PM
Congratulations, Lori on your interesting Rain story entry. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 1/13/2011 11:20:00 AM
very pretty tale. Congratulations. Love, Joyce
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Date: 1/13/2011 6:34:00 AM
Congratulations onn this well deserved win in the contest of Constance, Lori
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Date: 1/12/2011 9:05:00 PM
Many Congrats Lori on big win with this imaginative verse.Best wishes/Luv - Hitendra Mehta
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Date: 1/12/2011 8:29:00 PM
Congrats Lori on your wonderful win in the Rain Story contest with this exquisite entry .. enjoy your success with luv..
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Date: 12/21/2010 5:34:00 PM
very strong write here my friend
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