P.S. Awtry | + Follow Poet |
Rhyme | + Fav Poem | Comment | Email | Print |

Rain Dance

rain dance

Evil takes his victory lap
while ashes like confetti fall.
But demons stay their hands mid-clap,
now doubting they’ve won, after all...

For on the charred and war-stained sands,
Hope, in pink galoshes stands.




September 29, 2019
Make IT Six Contest
Picture #4
Joseph May, Sponsor

Copyright © P.S. Awtry | Year Posted 2019

Please Login to post a comment

Susan Lawrence Date: 2/14/2021 10:30:00 AM "But demons stay their hands mid-clap" I love this disruption in their victory ! Beautiful hopeful and haunting poem. Amazing! Congratulations on your win! Susan :) Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 2/19/2021 7:06:00 PM Thank you! -ps

Anna Hopper Date: 10/28/2019 4:17:00 PM I am absolutely blown away! Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/28/2019 4:56:00 PM Thank you for your enthusiastic response :)

Jennifer Proxenos Date: 10/21/2019 12:57:00 PM My goodness me what an intense powerful write - I am certainly not surprised about your win this is a true gem which tugged at my heartstrings. Well penned P.S Hugs, Jennifer. Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/21/2019 2:32:00 PM Thank you Jennifer so much for this gracious comment :)

Andrew Fairchild Date: 10/20/2019 9:41:00 AM Absolutely beautiful. The true triumph of good over evil. They are going down, the demons, and they have already lost. Bravo! Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/20/2019 10:11:00 AM Thank you Andrew! Always good to hear from you :)

Susan Ashley Date: 10/14/2019 6:41:00 PM The power of your affecting poetry moves me to my core, P.S. My heart felt every poignant word, as well as the ray of hope depicted in your final line. Your lovely soulful talent allows this stirring gem to shine through the sadness. Belated congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan Login to Reply Susan Ashley Date: 10/14/2019 10:55:00 PM Thank you, P.S. and likewise, dear poetess.. P.S. Awtry Date: 10/14/2019 10:38:00 PM Thank you so very much Susan. It is always an honor to have your kind remarks on one of my poems. <3

Quoth Theraven Date: 10/12/2019 1:24:00 AM P.S., May God bless all the pink galoshes wearers, and if the time and inclination finds, may God bless the poet in you. -Richard Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/12/2019 5:35:00 AM May the Lord bless you as well :)

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 10/5/2019 2:53:00 PM Excellent, P.S. You tied right into the photo when you mentioned the pink galoshes. I hadn't even noticed them. Congratulations on your success in the contest! Hugs, Carolyn Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/5/2019 3:01:00 PM Thank you so much Carolyn :)

Robert Lindley Date: 10/3/2019 4:04:00 PM Splendid creation my friend. The depths of truth and the insight shows in six poetic verses a soul that seeks not the sweeter candy that so many modern poets just love to so deeply wallow in.IMHO.. A fav.. closing verses are perfect.. Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/3/2019 5:46:00 PM Robert thank you so much for your comments and for the much appreciated fav! -ps

Judy Ball Date: 10/3/2019 3:32:00 PM Hope We must hang tight to hope for without hope there is no future. Great write my friend. Love the ending. God Bless and good luck in the contest. JB Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/3/2019 5:07:00 PM Thank you Judy for your kind words. Much appreciated :)

Gershon Wolf Date: 10/2/2019 1:30:00 PM This is just a terrific write. Lighter than air -- with a telling message. Best of luck in the contest! Cheers, Gershon Login to Reply Gershon Wolf Date: 10/4/2019 1:28:00 PM A first-prize trophy for you in the contest, so richly deserved. Here's to you and to your winning poem! Cheers, Gershon P.S. Awtry Date: 10/2/2019 1:53:00 PM O wow, thank you, what a great comment.

Ralph Sergi Date: 10/2/2019 11:21:00 AM Hi P.S. I loved this poem , especiallly the ending! Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/2/2019 11:31:00 AM Thank you Ralph! :)-ps

Brenda Chiri Date: 10/2/2019 3:28:00 AM Wow this poem was great! A sure winner!;) best of luck but I doubt you need it!;) it's a winner!;) Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/2/2019 7:42:00 AM Wow! Thank you so much Brenda :)

Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/1/2019 5:19:00 PM Magnificent and amazing, PS! Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/1/2019 5:21:00 PM Thank you so much Michelle :)

Panagiota Romios Date: 10/1/2019 1:07:00 PM The human spirit, I see, can overcome just about anything. Well penned. Panagiota Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/1/2019 2:15:00 PM Thank you Panagiota! glad you liked it. :)

Geoffrey Brewer Date: 10/1/2019 8:12:00 AM Lovely sentiment, beautifully expressed. For me, this is a winner, PS. Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 10/1/2019 8:57:00 AM Thank you so very much Geoffrey. School children venturing out with their backpacks amid that ruin... Puts me in awe of the courage and resilience of the human spirit.

Line Gauthier Date: 9/30/2019 4:45:00 PM Bravo, PS. Powerful. A FAVE for me. Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/30/2019 4:48:00 PM O wow! Thank you, so much Line! -ps

Gary Smith Date: 9/29/2019 5:20:00 PM Excellent poetry P.S. :) Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/29/2019 5:21:00 PM thank you Gary :)

Robert L. Hinshaw Date: 9/29/2019 5:06:00 PM Splendid entry for the contest and a sure winner, P.S.! Many thanks for your kind comments re Abandoned School Building and best to you as you continue your poetical journey - Bob Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/29/2019 5:09:00 PM Thank you so much Bob :)

Caren Krutsinger Date: 9/29/2019 4:28:00 PM This is well done indeed! Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/29/2019 4:33:00 PM Thank you Caren! So glad to be writing something again!

Rico Leffanta Date: 9/29/2019 4:01:00 PM Well done, indeed! Aloha! Rico Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/29/2019 4:11:00 PM Hello Rico, thank you so much :)

Timothy Mcguire Date: 9/29/2019 3:45:00 PM Yes evil did not win! Clever, good luck Login to Reply P.S. Awtry Date: 9/29/2019 3:46:00 PM Thank you so much my dear friend! :)