William Kelii Kekaula Poet Haiku

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Rain and Pearl Drops

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rain and pearl drops

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(*rain drops
syllable-based; 5-3-5.)

rain weaves north current
clouds knot up
patterns burst their seams

(*The Gulf Stream - Land has a lower heat capacity than oceans, and it also heats and cools faster than oceans. During the winter, the land is much colder than the oceans. When the westerly winds blow over it, the air cools substantially.)

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(**pearl drops
word-based; 3-5-3.)

snow white balls
melts from a woman's neck
swine frolic atop

(**Matthew 7:6 "Give not that which is holy unto the dogs, neither cast ye your pearls before swine, lest they trample them under their feet, and turn again and rend you.")

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2021 May 16

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Suzette Richards October 18, 2021 at 1:20 PM Great example of America haiku (Kelly Lune), and it's matching Lune. I seem to favour the word-based Lune for my own compositions. Suzette Richards October 19, 2021 at 2:11 AM You are doing a sterling job, William. It is my opinion that a contest should honour the form (whatever is being highlighted) as visitors to this site should feel confident that the winning examples are a true reflection of a particular poetic form. Lune allows for rhymes and it is ideal for those poets who like to include rhymes in their haiku (where it is frowned upon). Well, creativity can be stifled by too much technical adherence, so write on ...! William Kelii Kekaula October 18, 2021 at 1:56 PM Suzette, hoping I got my updates right, it was some years ago of researching Lune. Thanks for your noting my morning breakfast jello. Quasi-methinks, I'll have jello all day long, Aloha!

Paul Callus October 17, 2021 at 9:42 AM The second Lune form (3-5-3) is quite similar to a normal haiku in which the middle line is usually longer than the other two. Of course, in this case we are tied by word count. Regards // paul William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 11:10 AM Numerically purposed brevity equally, whereto, it’ll not appear lopsided. Versions reasonably made, short-long and long-short, ergo, non-interchangeable. My thanks, Paul, for your shared highlights of interest my friend, Aloha!

Jan Allison October 17, 2021 at 7:53 AM I've not seen hauki written like this before, will see if i can come up with something for the contest:-) hugs Jan xx William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 9:23 AM A tossed stone into the pool, Jan, hopes its ripples creatively spread out my friend, Aloha!

Constance La France October 17, 2021 at 7:13 AM William, I like this Lune form a lot combining the syllable style and the word style makes for a wonderful poem, great example for your contest ~ peace and tranquility _Constance William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 9:14 AM I am appreciative of your encouraging words, Constance, and hope they'll pique your interest my friend, Aloha!

Joanna Daniel October 17, 2021 at 6:51 AM Awesome example for your contest, William, lovely short poem, great usage of apt words:) William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 9:08 AM I'm glad that you like them, Jo, and I hope it inspires my friend, Aloha!

Regina Mcintosh October 17, 2021 at 6:34 AM Wonderful example. Many blessings and love sent your way, Gina William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 8:59 AM Blessings, Gina, and enjoy this wondrous Sunday my friend, Aloha!

Krish Radhakrishna October 17, 2021 at 1:47 AM Nice example William! So is the first part about nature and second can be about anything? shall try. William Kelii Kekaula October 17, 2021 at 2:16 AM Krish, actually, the theme is about 'drops', via raindrops and pearls being dropped [metaphor: snow white balls melt] ("...cast ye your pearls..."). The theme is yours but some commonality that connects both versions. I hope that you do just that my friend, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich October 16, 2021 at 3:26 PM I see what you are doing now for your contest. Great idea, my friend!! William Kelii Kekaula October 16, 2021 at 3:35 PM Hi Andrea, as you now see, I've added text, whereto, necessitates imagery of the intended. Note, that only Lunes title and respective haikus, need only be posted my friend, Aloha!

Andrea Dietrich May 18, 2021 at 12:51 PM I think my favorite is the middle one, but that one-liner was sure a wonderful image, William! William Kelii Kekaula May 18, 2021 at 1:27 PM Oh, lol, that was the title of the two (now made it bold), first rain drops, second pearl drops, whereto, both described the "Lune", an American Haiku, oppose to its English version, via syllable-based and word-based, thanks for sharing Andrea, Aloha!