Rain

Rolling down the rooftop, ruffling by my glass pane, rippling on the sill like rhyming sound of a cool rapper's lyrics in a rhythmic beat of a drum. Rain is such a marvel! 08/13/2016 Note : For the contest (RAIN) by Eve Roper. *Placed First* Form of the poem is Pleiades. The title is described in 7 lines consisting of 6 syllables in each line and every line also starts with the same letter as of the title's first letter.

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/5/2017 9:55:00 PM

this is one of the best pleiades I have ever read. I'm gonna FAVE this one!!

Afzal Nusker
Date: 1/7/2017 6:31:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea. I am so glad you liked it.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/4/2016 11:59:00 AM

Very nice!

Afzal Nusker
Date: 9/5/2016 2:07:00 AM

Thank you, Kim.

Charlie Smith

Date: 8/21/2016 8:35:00 AM

Most interesting form. I've only tried it once. (Asea) Congratulations on your success.

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/24/2016 3:55:00 AM

Thankx, Charlie...I totally agree with u, the form is quite interesting & not easy too, but I enjoy writing in this form very much.

Dm Babbit

Date: 8/17/2016 5:53:00 AM

Short, direct and sweetly played. Congrats.

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/17/2016 11:29:00 AM

Thanx for stopping by and thank you very much for the compliment.

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 8/16/2016 10:32:00 AM

Lovely poem Afzal,congrats!

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/16/2016 11:56:00 AM

Thank you, Sara. :-)

John Hamilton

Date: 8/16/2016 6:40:00 AM

Really well done Afzal, enjoyed your pleiades very much. Congrats on the win!

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/16/2016 7:15:00 AM

Thank you very much, John. I really appreciate your kind words.

Joseph May

Date: 8/16/2016 5:11:00 AM

Congrats on a great win Afzal

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/16/2016 7:13:00 AM

Thank you, Joseph.

Jean Murray

Date: 8/16/2016 4:03:00 AM

For being so new to Poetrysoup, you are such a marvel Afzal. Welcome and well done to get to number one.

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/16/2016 7:11:00 AM

Thanx for your kind words, Jean.

Eve Roper

Date: 8/15/2016 5:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your win, Afzal ! Hug Eve

Eve Roper
Date: 8/16/2016 8:39:00 AM

Welcome,Afzal, to Soup, your poem said so much in such a few words "Excellent" :-)

Afzal Nusker
Date: 8/15/2016 10:38:00 PM

Thank you very much, Eve. It's really overwhelming for me to receive so much appreciation and love from you guys. I mean i am new to the community and yet you guys are supporting me so much. I am really grateful!