Rain

storm clouds gathering
umbrella poised and ready
my hair remains dry

08~08~14

Written for any poem under 5 lines #1 contest Sponsored by Poet Destroyer A
~awarded 3rd place~

rainsenryu

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Poet Destroyer A

August 29, 2014 at 10:17 AM

JAN, Thank You For replying to my comment :) LINDA

Casarah Nance

August 28, 2014 at 9:32 PM

Yay, hold them umbrella up so your medal doesn't get wet! Wonderful win sweetie xox

Jan Allison

August 29, 2014 at 4:08 AM

Thanks as aver Casarah:-) Your support means the world to me xxx

Joseph May

August 27, 2014 at 10:22 PM

Congrats on a fine win Jan

Jan Allison

August 28, 2014 at 1:17 AM

Many thanks for dropping by Joseph. Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

August 27, 2014 at 6:01 PM

Nice cause and effect senryu, Jan! Congrats on a big win.

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 6:18 PM

Thanks Andrea for the lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

August 27, 2014 at 2:08 PM

Congrats on your win with placement with this lovely poem. Loved always,my lovely friend,bl

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 4:11 PM

Many thanks for the lovely comment BL I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sarpong Kumankoma

August 27, 2014 at 11:17 AM

:-) Precisely done. Congrats on a well deserved 3rd place win.....Sarpong

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 11:40 AM

Many thanks for dropping by Sarpong:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

August 27, 2014 at 5:30 AM

Very clever write, Jan. congrats

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 5:42 AM

many thanks for you comment Dr Mehta: I do appreciate your support:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick

August 27, 2014 at 5:29 AM

Prodigious ...Way to go..Congrats..Sara

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 5:40 AM

many thanks Sara:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

August 26, 2014 at 11:01 PM

Congrats Jan on the win.....hugs Tim

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 4:26 AM

Many thanks as ever for your support Tim:-) I do appreciate all your kindness to me. Hugs Jan xxx

John Lawless

August 26, 2014 at 10:29 PM

Not the Hair--Not the Hair!! And I'll bet you took off the shoes too. captured the human foible aspect of the senryu perfectly(IMHO)

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 4:24 AM

It is my first attempt at this form John I am really happy with the result. many thanks for the comment:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Poet Destroyer A

August 26, 2014 at 9:43 PM

hi Jan, lol..I like the dry hair look..Lucky you... :) Congratulations! Thank you for supporting my under 5 lines or less contest. Enjoy my blog "One Hard Word" when and if you have time. Always ~ LINDA ~

Jan Allison

August 27, 2014 at 4:23 AM

Thank you so much for my 3rd place I am so happy I may go dancing in the rain :-) Hugs Jan xxxx

Andrea Dietrich

August 9, 2014 at 9:18 PM

A cute idea for your less than five lines. I wonder where all these contests of PD's are?? I see in my box they are judged? And yet not posted!

Jan Allison

August 10, 2014 at 5:29 AM

I thought I'd give the contest a go - not checked to see if they are posted but Linda finalises them pretty quickly which is great:-) Our jadazzle one is still not judged - we started then Darren went AWOL - as he set up the contest I wont judge it on my own so it may never get done now I fear:-( hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

August 9, 2014 at 11:37 AM

Glad that the hair did not get wet..Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for PD's contest..Thanks for stopping by..Your uplifting comment was encouraging..It is possible that the Magnolia will blossom still...I think sometimes it has to do with how warm the weather and how much sunlight they receive..Sara

Jan Allison

August 9, 2014 at 11:43 AM

Oh thanks for that advice Sara - the flower and scent is so beautiful and dear friends brought me the plant for my birthday 2 yrs ago so its is very special:-) Thanks also for the lovely comment on my simple poem:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

August 9, 2014 at 8:39 AM

you say so much in this tight style. a joy to read. thank you for this positive stimulation.

Jan Allison

August 9, 2014 at 8:43 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr.Ram Mehta

August 9, 2014 at 7:13 AM

Lovely humor, good luck in the contest, Jan

Jan Allison

August 9, 2014 at 7:18 AM

thanks for the lovely comment Dr Mehta:-) Hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

August 8, 2014 at 7:56 PM

ha! good one, jan!

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 8:01 PM

Thanks Ilene:-) Hugs jan xxx

Shadow Hamilton

August 8, 2014 at 7:20 PM

well captured Jan gl in contest hugs

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 7:21 PM

Thanks Shadow it was purely a spur of the moment write - we got drenched when we were York - i found out my 'waterproof' mac wasnt! Hugs Jan xx

Jslambert Mister Roboto

August 8, 2014 at 5:43 PM

Ha TIm's comment is funny down there! Hey how did your hair stay dry, oh yeah , the umbrella, OK I'M SLOW and Stoop-ED. Hey, High-Choos are so hard for me to write bc I heard that every time you do one, you lose 7 seconds off your life, is the true? (HHHHA-CHOOO!?) I am freakin slap happy tonight! I like your poem.

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 5:48 PM

Cheers Mr Roboto for the lovely comment and making me chuckle - and Tim is better off not to have a pic bless him he flatters me too much LOL. Hugs Jan xxx

James Fraser

August 8, 2014 at 5:43 PM

And indeed with such a contraption it will. Whilst my hair shall gradually wetten as I listen and Rock to one of my favourite 'Status Quo' tracks 'Rain' - - good luck in the contest Jan :)

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 6:04 PM

I love my music James it inspires me:-) Off to see a group tomorrow night called 'the birds and the beards' - the lead singer has the most incredible voice and the guitarists are phenomenal - the u tube of them doesn't do them justice - they always play 'feeling good' for me Hugs Jan xxx

James Fraser

August 8, 2014 at 5:56 PM

Jan, we're like the same ball, always bouncing off each other = koolio == have a lovely weekend, James xx

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 5:52 PM

Ive seen Quo about 3 times James - bestest gig EVER Knebworth 1986 when Queen headlined - AWESOME!!!! thanks for the lovely comment as ever. Jan xxxx

Tim Smith

August 8, 2014 at 5:13 PM

You have hair...clue number 4...lol...wonderful Jan...hugs Tim

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 5:23 PM

Good cos Darren got a pic and hes gone awol - couldn't bear for it to happen again LOL. Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

August 8, 2014 at 5:20 PM

I like the mystery Jan...just teasing.....hugs

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 5:17 PM

of course I have hair - Do you want a picture - on second thoughts just stick with your imagination Tim that will be far more beautiful! Hugs Jan xxx

Casarah Nance

August 8, 2014 at 4:57 PM

Gotta love umbrellas, too bad toes still get wet though :( great poem sweetie, fun to read :)

Jan Allison

August 8, 2014 at 5:02 PM

Thanks Cas I wrote it on a whim- got to admit umbrellas are useless here as the wind can whisk them away or blow them inside out and there is a graveyard of broken brollies in the street LOL . Hugs Jan xxx