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Rain

rain pitter-patters 'pon
umbrella which turns
the hottest noon-day sun....
soft sand, gentle waves
pamper small aching feet

beachtanka

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Howard Kerr

March 8, 2025 at 5:55 AM

Sara, to answer your question regarding bores in my poem some may ultimately adjust their behaviour when ostracised. Your tanka oozes charm, a very visual imagery, and immaculate plot Howard

Sara Kendrick

March 8, 2025 at 8:24 AM

Howard, most would say it was the other way around and it was the other people's fault for doing the ostracizing. I am sure though that some would change if they could. Sara K

Kim Rodrigues

December 24, 2024 at 7:58 PM

Love the imagery! Love the last line!

Sara Kendrick

December 25, 2024 at 2:57 AM

Why, thank you, Kim. I appreciate the visit. Sara K

Yann Rolland

December 24, 2024 at 4:39 PM

so musical and descriptive,waw, enjoyed, merry Christmas

Sara Kendrick

December 25, 2024 at 2:56 AM

Why, thank you, Yann. I appreciate the visit. Sara K

Nette Onclaud

December 22, 2024 at 2:26 PM

charming portrait of Tanka using rain, sun, water as cohesive element for this piece... love it, sara!

Sara Kendrick

December 22, 2024 at 4:08 PM

Thank you, Nette. I appreciate the visit and uplifting review. Sara K

Jennifer Proxenos

December 22, 2024 at 7:01 AM

Your poem is excellent for the contest Sara my friend - pitter patter rain is what we have at present, so enjoyable especially as our temperature last week went up to 36, unbearable. Be well, love and hugs Jennifer.

Sara Kendrick

December 22, 2024 at 4:07 PM

Wonderful that you had showers to cool things down. I love the summer rain that brings in a cooling period to break up the sometimes-horrible heat of summer. Thank for the visit, Jennifer. I appreciate the visit. Sara K