Rabbit Hole

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Descending the rabbit hole of debt as he gambles away his hard-earned money, his... life is... spiraling downward. His marriage turns shaky as his wife threatens divorce proceedings if... he keeps self-destructing. (Yalto) Date written: 09/22/2019

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Ahyia Amankwah

Date: 11/13/2019 11:14:00 AM

'turns shaky' brings out everything one needs to know when one is 'descending... hole of debt'. Massive way of portraying realism in monetary challenges.

Edward Ibeh
Date: 11/13/2019 2:47:00 PM

Thank you, Ahyia:-) Most appreciated.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/26/2019 7:29:00 AM

The "rabbit hole" for sure!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 9/26/2019 9:04:00 AM

Thank you, Caren:-)

Line Gauthier

Date: 9/22/2019 4:17:00 PM

I felt the spiral. Well penned, Edward.

Edward Ibeh
Date: 9/22/2019 4:27:00 PM

Thank you, Line:-)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/22/2019 3:32:00 PM

This flows so well to tell a cohesive story..despite the syllable restrictions of your invented form, Edward. Who better to write it that the one who designed it! Kudos!!

Edward Ibeh
Date: 9/22/2019 4:27:00 PM

Thank you so much, Vijay:-) Glad you liked it!