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Purest Thoughts

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    Shimmering
       swaying
  her hair to her
         waist
      the blond
     the auburn 
yes reddish brown
     all glowing

With the purest of 
      thoughts
I have focused on

      the grey

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Daver Austin Date: 3/19/2013 7:27:00 AM Going a way back - unexplored territory. I should say under explored. A sure glance of love, I hope. Fasting - never thought of it. My thoughts are too selfishly on food. Love, daver Login to Reply

Sharon Winter Date: 5/11/2009 4:45:00 PM Hmm...doesn't surprise me for some reason. Well, ok maybe it does. Well I don't know many men who's thoughts are totally pure, that's for sure. Ok, will give you the benefit of the doubt. You are after all, a poet. And an excellent one at that. (Thanks for your comment, a lot of my older stuff is yucky blah, be warned.) Love, Shar Login to Reply

L'Nass Shango Date: 5/9/2009 5:47:00 PM An imagery so sudden in the ending ... smile without volition ... that's one of the many the things I like about your write ... there is always a sweet element of surprise. Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 5/9/2009 4:33:00 AM recomment--its ok my friend why do you worry?i did that mistake myself sometimes,call me whatevever you want,you made me smile-becoming a nervous wreck?;-)lol--thanks for your kind comments kiddo---charma Login to Reply

Carolyn Devonshire Date: 5/8/2009 7:52:00 PM Ooops, James. I'm sure she didn't want you to see that gray! Actually, all of the colors in her long hair make her sound uniquely beautiful. Love this poem! Carolyn Login to Reply

Charmaine Chircop Date: 5/8/2009 11:21:00 AM this is sweet,you re thinking about a mature woman here,without the fake colours in her hair,this reminds me a bit of me,difference my hair is brown,no grey;-)i like changing the colour of my hair to look different ,but the nicest is always the purest--how God created us, and the different colours remind me of different images i try to give of myself ,yet once again,the pure thought of being myself is best---wonderful imagery,i feel this poem telling me--be you--bravo Login to Reply

Anna-Marie Docherty Date: 5/8/2009 9:14:00 AM Very well written, a shame this mark of maturity catches us off guard! lol. Comes to us all. Liked the versions that Ann also recognised, but maybe it was a fear of ageing yourself that took you to writing this? lol. Then comes the question as to colour and pretend, or grow old gracefully with natures intention...See where the muse has taken us now? lol.... Got to favorite it now!! lol. Login to Reply

Ann Anderson Date: 5/8/2009 8:12:00 AM Hello james, this poem as I read it seems to have two meanings,with purest thoughts I have focused on the grey ie (a little sensual thought going on) but I also read it as a funny line, you focused on the odd grey hair which really made me laugh, either way two good poems for the price of one. best wishes Ann. Login to Reply