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The Poorest Choice in life. I’m not being judgmental nor commenting on my feedback I’m just clarifying and respectfully explaining my view of the poem. I appreciate the feedback, I understand when a poem is written everyone relates to it in a different way. One never knows the ramifications of a single piece of work. In the epigram form there is not much to work with due to the six syllable meter. In my initial thought of ‘Aborted,’ from my creative perspective, was a metaphor of aborting a single thought. If one aborts a thought, the poem cannot be born into existence, thus no life of words, no poetry, nor a beautiful contribution to literature to continue or record our stay in time, etc. I categorized my poem as life because we abort things daily and that’s a part of life. I am explaining the creative depth of my poem’s entirety. Yes, life can be aborted along with a thought, or a wonderful opportunity. When poetry is written it is usually draped in metaphors and similes from the creators vision and unique perspective. I hope my explanation shows the depth of a poem goes way deeper than its surface... Raul Moreno

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Date: 1/15/2009 12:16:00 AM
Raul good work here.You have captured the essence of short forms slightly enigmatic leaving the reader to take part in the communication as they have don here.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments.
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Date: 11/24/2008 3:40:00 PM
This is a hidden jewel in your list of poems. I thank you for all your wonderful comments. Keep up the good work, Your work always touched a place in my heart and soul. God Bless Love Elizabeth
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Date: 11/24/2008 3:38:00 PM
Wow, this poem is strong in its meaning. I have aborted thought that never seen the light of day. This is a powerful write. I love the concept behind it and way you nice said it. The explanation makes better sense in the explanation behind the piece.
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Date: 11/24/2008 3:28:00 PM
Thanks for the advice you gave me. My work has been becoming tighter and stronger.
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Date: 11/24/2008 3:27:00 PM
This poems speaks so much and relates to just about anything. You did a great job here.
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Date: 11/17/2008 12:20:00 PM
we must often think about our choices, both to do or not to do. very thoughtful........
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Date: 11/12/2008 3:21:00 AM
Brovo! I concur wholeheartedly! Beautifully stated Raul!
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Date: 11/12/2008 1:41:00 AM
made a choice to resolve their mistake and they have suffered so much. My heart goes out to all the mother and the unborn. When you think about it sin is what cause most abortions and the mistake that someone makes is taken care of by eliminating the child. It wasn't the childs fault it was their indiscretion. Have the child and give it up for adoption so many people can't have babies. Anyways It is sad all the way around I pray that I didn't offend anyone with my comments I love you alllll
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Date: 11/12/2008 1:36:00 AM
WOW Raul this is my favorite Epigram. This is one of my favorite poem's ever. You speak Ocean's here. Touching and emotionaland poignant. This is a masterpiece. It creates volumnes of emotion and from my personal feelings everyone will have an opinion. Sadly we all have to someday be judge by Jesus Christ my heavenly father whether you believe or not. S that is your choice to make and suffer the consequences either way. I still pray for those mother's that have abortions I know many that have..
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Date: 11/8/2008 4:26:00 PM
I appreciate your explanation and see your poem in a whole new light. Sorry to have misinterpreted, but as you say, considering it is poetry, and considering the limited number of words in the form, it is easy to do. Love, Shar
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Date: 11/8/2008 2:42:00 PM
first the poem reads with power. I love the directness of the read. I would never want to be a woman and have to make that choice, so I will never judge. Leave that to the almighty. Thank God for choices!
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