Pretty Little House

"she asked 
if i was
empty"

there's a house
on the corner
that once stood
so pretty
now it sits
empty
on a thin frame
weakened
from the hands
of time

there's no laughter
echoing
down halls
no  shadows
of youth
dancing
on walls

it just sits
empty
weighted down
in winter's storms
waiting to collapse
beneath the weight
that it bares

it's cold
and alone
just awaiting
that final blow
that brings it
crashing down

for now it sits
empty
on a thin
weakened frame

knowing
it can't be fixed
perhaps
i should 
show her
this house
it's empty
inside
and out
Copyright © | Year Posted 2019

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Mcgee Avatar
June 1, 2020 at 1:58 PM
Wow. Very sly with powerful images worn. congrats on your win Sandra.
There Avatar
October 30, 2019 at 3:02 PM
This is a powerful piece, Sandra. And no one can ever really know what's on the inside unless they have walked in our shoes. Even words, if one's willing to share, are only a glimpse...
There Avatar
October 31, 2019 at 10:02 PM
I'll say 'another's' shoes though I won't say I don't know what empty feels like.
Adams Avatar
October 31, 2019 at 5:58 PM
Thank you so much....sounds like you may have walked in these shoes, or similar by your response....i share, it helps me stay strong.... :)
Pandit Avatar
October 30, 2019 at 6:50 AM
A powerful message in this metaphoric creation my friend: knowing it can't be fixed perhaps i should show her this house it's empty inside and out. Sad but sometimes so true..many can relate to.
Adams Avatar
October 30, 2019 at 9:17 AM
Thank you Vijay...we all get extra weight sometimes...it's part of life...you learn eventually to carry the weight i guess...but apparently my dr thinks i should be depressed, though i am not...sometimes frustrated.... hugs :)
Green Avatar
October 29, 2019 at 10:16 AM
Still a bit sad but so very creative. I love the analogy you have penned in this wonderful poem.Showing her what empty and fragile looks like.
Adams Avatar
October 29, 2019 at 10:26 AM
thank you ... this one was haunting my mind all morning...i actually texted some to myself so i wouldn't forget it all...but i didn't need to look at it, i remembered it all....guess i am feeling like that house today :( ...hugs
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