Pretense of Love

If you were not going to 
Love me in the morning,
You should have crept away
Into the moonlight, 
Faceless
You should have left 
Before the daylight
Burst into the bedroom
With sparkling hope

You should not have stayed
Lingered
Loitered 
Laughing in my kitchen
Drinking from my plastic mug
Acting as If 
You were going to throw 
Your painted mask
Into the fire

No
You should have 
Faded away
Like an echo into a canyon
Like a name on the tip of a tongue
Like a dream almost recalled --
The only clue that you were here
An indentation in my sheets 
I could have smoothed away

Instead of This 
This pretense of love 
Of normalcy, 
Of old lovers on 
An ordinary day,
When you won’t even
Look me in the eye --

If there is no hope 
Of love
Of a you and me, an “us” 
Then please just LEAVE
I fiercely prefer 
The fleeting memory
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Oyewole Avatar
April 20, 2013 at 10:42 AM
Great write and Great win... You really deserve it~A.O
May Avatar
April 20, 2013 at 6:29 AM
great write and win Susan...congrats
A   Avatar
April 19, 2013 at 9:49 PM
Susan, Congratulations IN HONOR OF Andrea's favorite POEM contest. *Always & Forever' @->- LINDA -<-@
Gasun Avatar
April 19, 2013 at 9:35 PM
Many congrats my dear friend Susan! This is indeed great and amazing heartfelt write! I love it so much & so enjoyed. Thank you so much for sharing this gem of yours! Big hugs in return! Have a grace-filled day! Love and hugs, Leonora
A  Avatar
April 19, 2013 at 8:38 PM
Susan, a sweet win~*~SKAT
Brown Avatar
November 14, 2012 at 7:54 AM
Congratulations on your win in Nathan's "Free Verse Writers" contest Susan. Love, Carol
Sweetheart Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 12:52 PM
THANKXX SUSAN FOR CHOOSING MY ENTRY AS A WINNER FOR ANY POEM CONTEST LUV .. AM SO HAPPY U ENJOY MY WORDS .. AS I DO YOURS LUV ..
May Avatar
November 12, 2012 at 9:09 AM
well penned Susan.....congrats on your win and thank you so much for mine...
Gasun Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 11:26 PM
CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR BIG WIN MY DEAR FRIEND SUSAN! CHEERS! Thank you so much for sharing and also for my placement in your "Wrongfully Imprisonment" contest. More power and graces to you always! love/hugs, Leonora
Sweetheart Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 11:12 PM
CONGRATS SUSAN ON A TREMENDOUS WRITE AND WIN FOR FREE VERSE LUV .. ALSO THANKXX FOR MY WINNING PLACE IN WRONGFUL IMPRISONMENT .. A GREAT CHALLENGE LUV ..
D. Avatar
November 11, 2012 at 7:27 PM
' Good win' Nate
Merryman Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 5:54 PM
Congrats on your win, Susan! Love, Kim
Sweetheart Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 1:21 PM
congrats Susan on a stupendous win for this elegant entry luv.. great emotional lines that reach into the depth of the heart ...
Puddifoot Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 1:13 PM
congrats on your contest win, this one cuts like a knife...I've read the razor's edge of your poetry before; you're a powerful writer...
Brown Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 11:55 AM
Congratulations to you on your placement in Debbie Guzzi's "Your Own Favorite Poem" contest Susan. Love, Carol
Quigley Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 10:07 AM
This is beautiful Sue. A sentiment not restricted to the fairer sex. We men too have been played. Congratulations
Taylor Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 9:47 AM
Congrats, Sue. Awesome write. Well deserved win. Nice going. Best to you and yours. luv Ralph
Guzzi Avatar
February 7, 2012 at 9:01 AM
so true Sue there was a point when I wanted THEM to feel the way they make us feel..I did it once or twice to 'try on' the behavior..I'm glad to say I was as disgusted with myself when I acted that way as I was with them/men! Congrad's on your fine win. Light & Love
Brown Avatar
January 24, 2012 at 6:16 AM
Thank you for your kind comments on my writings Susan. You are very observent when you read. Yes I did a repost but changed it up some with help from Andrea. It was a pleasure to read your poetry today. Love, Carol
Minardi Avatar
January 22, 2012 at 8:18 AM
wow, I love this one. Full of anger, just match with what I feel rite now. A dark poem, excellent, Susan.
Dietrich Avatar
January 21, 2012 at 4:12 PM
MORe poems, sweetie!!! just dropping by to say hi.
Marcum Wong Avatar
January 19, 2012 at 10:51 PM
An Excellent free verse poem filled with the kind of emotion that cuts deep and leaves one understanding that empty feeling that remains long after.
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January 15, 2012 at 6:09 PM
Susan ! excellent description of a situational feeling... You have captured it's essence here in this write and a powerful send off.... I fiercely prefer... the fleeting memory... great job of it. I bet you feel like you have captured it. nice. If I write a poem no matter what it entails and I get the "I captured what I wanted to say"thing, I know my write is a success. Matters not what anyone else says. cool. You done done it.
Dietrich Avatar
January 15, 2012 at 6:01 PM
WOWOWOW, THIS is one of your best. Don't ever think you can't write free verse. you just did! FAVE.
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