Predator

Who is the hunter? Who is the victim? Where do we place the blame? Anger surging 
through our veins, sadness feeding on the pain...a reflection and heap of human 
nature; its all the same. Beyond normality, the killer writes a piece of work that was 
never revised. Fragments of thoughts remain on this page.

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My love, my predator...false defender You left me unconscious Struggling, choking... Into the abyss you will dwell Forever rotting in Hell Crazed and disoriented Weak as a wounded deer How can I feel such rage and fear? This madness growing in my bones It’s never what I called my own Feel the pain Kill the pain Where I remain. The love, the hidden wars Opening up a thousand doors And throughout the wars The predator scores Feeding hungrily on the sores My love, my predator...false defender You left me unconscious Struggling, choking... Into the abyss you will dwell Forever rotting in Hell You’ll never know what you meant to me... Determination ignites Despite the blinding light That burns through your tattered wings You predator! You murderer! Are you ready for this? Through rage I force myself on, Though these vines of pain keep growing on And throughout the wars Who knows who scores? The predator? The victim? My love, my predator...false defender You left me unconscious Struggling, choking... Into the abyss you will dwell Forever rotting in Hell I will find you, Mark you and bind you, I will find you, find you Mark you and grind you.. In pieces... A flawless predator! Your blood drains and pours On those many blood-stained doors! My love will blanket the abyss, Laughing at your misfortune The laughter I’ll never miss... In no time I will find you, smite you, remind you, Of what I endured! Murderer to the core! Below in the abyss where I lay the love blanket smothers me indeed, the trap was set for me I am the predator, false defender! You have ignited her! Face her! Bind her! She is your predator Feed on her sores Savior the pain For there you will remain.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 10/2/2014 7:25:00 PM
Words to describe your words seem inadequate. I love the use of repetition, it is like watching a picture develop in a dark room, ghostly image clarifying in the solution and then becoming crystal clear.
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Laura Breidenthal
Date: 10/2/2014 8:22:00 PM
Interesting way of putting it, Richard. The repetition was meant to intensify as the poem continued and I am happy you liked it. This poem is one of my oldest. -this was based on a girl who was left to rot-- who was abused, but she rises from the fire, as the fire. ~Laura
Date: 11/17/2011 10:33:00 PM
Dear Laura, Superb POETRY Again YOU are very Impressive with YOUR POEMS I am sorry I was in hospital for last 2 weeks but I'm back LOVE ALWAYS and FOREVER YOUR Liege...Harry
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Date: 6/28/2011 8:03:00 PM
if i could put into one word...STUNNING
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