Praying Mantis

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focused praying mantis still as a stick

clueless prey three times its size

best friend of gardeners

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Poetry notes:
10/13/2019

Poetry form: Kimo - An Israeli form of haiku that has three lines with a 10-7-6 syllable format and which does not rhyme. Also, the Kimo is focused on a single frozen image (kind of like a snapshot). So it's uncommon to have any movement happening in kimo poems.

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focused praying mantis still as a stick clueless prey three times its size best friend of gardeners *** October 13, 2019 F F I series 27 kimo Brian Strand, sponsor

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Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 10/16/2019 11:37:00 AM

A perfect stillness of kimo. Nice!

Mark Toney
Date: 10/16/2019 12:05:00 PM

Thank you for your wonderful comment, Jeanne. ~Mark

Wendy Watson

Date: 10/13/2019 2:20:00 PM

Hello Mark This was a very clever theme to choose bearing in mind the snapshot, no motion criteria of a kimo poem. The first line set the scene and drew us in brilliantly.

Mark Toney
Date: 10/13/2019 3:05:00 PM

You are a dear soul, Wendy, so gracious and kind. ~Mark

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/13/2019 11:41:00 AM

Great one Mark :)

Mark Toney
Date: 10/13/2019 1:39:00 PM

Thanks, Heidi :) ~Mark

Silent One

Date: 10/13/2019 8:43:00 AM

Nice one Mark, I have a plant by this name..

Mark Toney
Date: 10/13/2019 11:12:00 AM

Thank you, Silent One. The insect is amazing. I wasn’t aware of the plant by that name. You've given me something to research :) ~Mark