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Image result for pictures of a yellow rising sun Jack Collum word based form of Haiku called a Lune, words 3/5/3

pound

pound cake sun
blocked by darkening charcoal clouds....
air feels eerie

anxietyemotionsjunehaiku

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Anne-Lise Andresen

July 2, 2026 at 4:49 AM

- ... maybe thunder in store ... great writing, Sara :) - hugs

Sara Kendrick

July 2, 2026 at 6:49 AM

Usually, Anne-Lise, when that eerie feeling happens there is going to be some kind of change, but the change has not happened yet. I can hope we'll get some rain today though. Sara K.

Valsa George

June 30, 2026 at 8:13 PM

'Charcoal clouds'. ... Love this metaphor. Beautiful Haiku.

Sara Kendrick

July 1, 2026 at 4:30 AM

Thank you, Valsa. Thank you for the nice compliment. Sara K.

Andrea Dietrich

June 30, 2026 at 2:23 PM

Such interesting image and metaphor, Sara

Sara Kendrick

June 30, 2026 at 4:15 PM

Why, thank you, Andrea. I appreciate the visit and nice review. Sara K.

Mike Bayles

June 30, 2026 at 7:45 AM

nice picture of the eclipse.

Sara Kendrick

June 30, 2026 at 1:34 PM

Thank you, Mike, I appreciate the wonderful comments. Sara K.

Yann Rolland

June 30, 2026 at 7:39 AM

well done, seems very hot there, enjoyed

Sara Kendrick

June 30, 2026 at 1:33 PM

Yann, close to one hundred degrees when figuring in the humidity factor but it is not as bad as it gets sometimes in the heat of summer. Thank you for the nice visit and kind review. Sara K.

Kim Rodrigues

June 30, 2026 at 6:08 AM

My mind went wild with your first line! Well done, poet!

Sara Kendrick

June 30, 2026 at 7:35 AM

I am delighted you found an element upon which to go wild, Kim. I thought about my mother's homemade pound cake that morning when I saw the sun, then the next day it was covered by a dark cloud, so this one came to mind. Those cakes were wonderful and she sometimes would top a slice with strawberries or peeled peaches sprinkled with sugar then some home whipped cream (canned carnation milk with a little lemon juice). Thank you for the visit. Sara K.