Debbie Guzzi Poet Senryu

Possessive Perspectives

being number one
wiggles underneath the rock
a spade descends

being number two
hides behind the rock
a foot falls

being number three
lays on top of the flat rock
skin to stone

being number four
perches atop the rock
shells crack

being number six
flies over  the rock
guano falls


*who are the beings [do you see them in your head? I didn't tell you!]
**how big is the rock [did you see it in your head? I didn't tell you.]
*** how did what happen, happen? in line 3 did you see it in your head?

**** haiku and senryu are in the moment verses which require
showing not telling and the bulk of the poem is always in the readers mind
not the poets pen.

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Andrea Dietrich October 7, 2013 at 10:59 PM I just got the birds, Debs. The first three could be lots of different things for me. I really enjoyed these. Thanks for the winners list. I really enjoyed your contest. is the first one a snake or other wiggly animal?

Jack Horne July 9, 2013 at 2:46 PM love these senyru, Debs - what's the main difference between haiku and senyru? Also, any tips on tanka, please? Congrats on your wins

Joe Maverick June 26, 2013 at 2:25 PM 1 worm 2 mouse 3 reptile 4 bird dropping snail shells, no 6 seagull? dropping droppings..' L O L... but what happened to being no 5??? anyway have enjoyed the visit Debbie. Debbie Guzzi June 26, 2013 at 2:55 PM 1 toad LOL [they can too wiggle!] 2 cricket 3 ME 4 bird 5 Debbie can't count? 6 more bird seagull! Joe Maverick June 26, 2013 at 2:26 PM Hey the captcha code on last reply box was dybs..'

Matthew Anish June 22, 2013 at 3:52 PM I find this set of senryu to be stimulating! I am trying to figure out what creatures you are talking about - the first one is a worm, I believe Peace & Love Matthew Anish Debbie Guzzi June 22, 2013 at 3:58 PM ahh for YOU Mat it can be a worm!! LOL maybe for me it was a snake! what matters is the vision YOU build in YOUR mind!

Eileen Manassian June 21, 2013 at 2:55 PM HI DEBBIE! Thanks for visiting my poem....I did take you advice. I changed it to a sonnet. :) I don't know why writing sonnets are so hard for me...At least this way it came naturally! With your help, of course! Thanks! I had to look up guano for this one! I'm learning from you! Such an interesting write this is....poor thing..Hugs!