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Portal of Life's Dream....

As he approaches the barlit entry stopping momentarily...to look, into the reflection of plateglass, he wonders,as a straigtened collar refits itself... Will this be the life changing moment, another of life's portals entered, mysteriously anticipated,nervously awaiting are two hearts,hopeful... Envisioning through the eye of soul, a new sparkling portal...he enters smiling...

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Derrick Burton

Date: 8/31/2008 10:47:00 AM

wow, been reading you and I really like your gifts with words and reality, and how you put them together with both. great poem.

Lucinda Bulger

Date: 8/30/2008 9:27:00 AM

wow...how intriguing. I like the unknown factor in this and the way you closed it was awesome, leaves the reader to wonder a bit and be hopeful for him. Just fantastic!

Sara Lokken

Date: 8/6/2008 2:01:00 PM

Wow, a beautiful inspirational piece! A lot of thoughts to contemplate as well. Regards, Sara:)

Sharon Winter

Date: 8/1/2008 7:35:00 AM

Ooh, so hoping it is a portal of love. lol! Love this continuation of Kristin's poem. Nicely done Jay. Feeling like I'd want to try to add a third. Love, Shar

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/31/2008 9:38:00 PM

Wouldn't time portals be fantastic. An awesome poem Jay. God Bless Phyl

Michael Jordan

Date: 7/31/2008 9:22:00 PM

Jay - You do have a special gift indeed - I always enjoy your poetry - God Bless Jay

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 7/31/2008 10:05:00 AM

YAY! A happy ending to my poor, lady at the bar...ya gotta love a happy ending and a good, open portal. :) Awesome, my friend. I don't mind a bit, actually this story could go on a bit more...who wants to write the next verse to our story? lol Love Kristin