Portal

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Poetic Form: Rhyme
Inspired: 2024 January 17

*2nd Place*
Precipice, Portal, Perpetual Words
Contest Judged: 2024 January 29
Sponsored by: Constance La France

Image: Heaven's Gate by Fine Arts America

Be ye a temple to thyself, be plain and simple right off the shelf, or be a Mayan of long ago, a calendar odds that stole the show, Be here a while and gone the next, if you have felt your life being hexed, these venues of opportunity, hexing snooze to possibility, Be heedful of the portal, since your existence was made immortal, soul peradventures a righteous cause, be it the moon or faraway Mars, Be the creator, make with the muse, these, doors and gates your point of views, a tune o'er an opera house, a suite harmony quiets the schoolhouse, Be of the arts, if not Mozart, then ... Van Gogh, Cezanne, Monet even, said portal, 'tis a gift for the mind entertained, enlightened, and refined, Be out that great door, and simply explore, unlike Poe's dear sweet Lenore, that raven made Poe feel poor, the portal's key, he'll be free forevermore, Be Poe and Lenore, forevermore, sans that raven, evens the score, that portal answers your questions, bear your confessions, free from transgressions, Behold the truth, the truth of it all, that gate, that door, so-called, portal, there's more to life than just break-even, that portal is … your way to heaven.

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Constance La France

Date: 2/14/2024 9:03:00 AM

Hilo, excellent poem and I love the image, and congratulations on your win in my contest, blessings, Constance

Hilo Poet
Date: 2/14/2024 9:29:00 AM

Hi, Constance, I'm happy hearing from you, blessings--[ enjoy the challenge, when and if I've the time, my friend. Aloha, William

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/17/2024 3:40:00 PM

I enjoyed this "be" poem....it was powerful with its own authenticity. I sincerely like the portal concept and all that it symbolizes in my mind. I agree, there's more to life than mediocrity...the portal you describe is the way to heave. I agree! well done! have a great evening, Sara

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/17/2024 4:38:00 PM

Ah, yes, Sara. Who holds the key, ''He holds the key to the...(mom would sing)...it needn't be an established thing, --can be helpful, healthful, financial--just sharing a great evening with, my friend. Aloha, William

Silent One

Date: 1/17/2024 11:07:00 AM

I like how your poem explores the theme of self-discovery, opportunity, and the transformative power of creativity. The poet encourages the reader to be true to oneself, embracing simplicity or complexity, much like a plain and simple shelf or the intricate Mayan calendar. The verses touch upon the transient nature of life and the influence of external forces, suggesting that one should be mindful of the opportunities presented by the ever-changing portals of existence...

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/17/2024 1:38:00 PM

The mind trends inceptive moods, being an indulgent expectant--a reactionary trigger--clueless soul consoles the fallout from the overwhelming energy of the mind, hence its measure from the vital organs ... embodied apathy controlled beats in veinous drips of life. Sadly, many portals are--out to lunch, out of business, and mostly--out of order. Thanks, Silent One. Aloha, William

Sand Blown

Date: 1/17/2024 10:48:00 AM

...nice one...wowza.....through the port- hole be an other vision of the world one just left....time, cause, effect....all there to examine and adjust for some future present......stan

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/17/2024 12:59:00 PM

Ah yes, such is the complexities of human expectations — the soul is clueless to the mind incepts but does consolation noting the mindset is an overwhelming energy hence the distinct separation from our vitals…thanks my friend, Aloha William