Pop

He fills me Like a supermarket Bubble gum dispenser With black eyes Of condescension Give me a dime Eye will give you A glance That will POP Your bubble 6/12/12

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/7/2013 10:21:00 AM

A great Free -for-all winning poem. *CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome winning write. have a great day, TA TA TA * Linda

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 7/7/2013 12:31:00 AM

Congrats, Susan, it's great poetry!!

Skat A

Date: 7/3/2013 11:54:00 PM

awesome............. SKAT

Karen Anglesey

Date: 7/3/2013 7:22:00 PM

Susan, witty and seductive... very original and creative. Congrats on your win :)

Connie Gildersleeve

Date: 7/3/2013 6:22:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserve win. Wow, edgy and to the point, powerful write Sue. Warm Smiles, Connie

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2013 5:27:00 PM

wow, Susan, check this out, you are a top winner among only six top tens!! Congrats.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 2/7/2013 10:33:00 AM

goes the weasel ..pd

Nick Bagnall

Date: 7/12/2012 5:48:00 AM

odd, I like that she only gives a glance, like he's relly not worth looking at, interesting.

Kathryn Collins

Date: 6/22/2012 7:20:00 AM

Susan for all those full of themselves baboons. Perfect. love, Kathy

David Williams

Date: 6/22/2012 1:10:00 AM

Susan congrats on your win..David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/20/2012 9:06:00 PM

Awesome to see you on this list. I got on the other list of his. not this one. BIG congrats, Susan. I love this one too.

Gwendolen Song

Date: 6/20/2012 3:15:00 PM

Intense tho'ts....evil-lurking in his lust-filled eyes....whoa. Great analogy to bubble gum bc it's pretty cheap too! Congrats on your win, Susan. :) Gwendolen

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 6/20/2012 12:05:00 PM

Congratulations on your winning place xx

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet

Date: 6/20/2012 10:25:00 AM

LOL,YOU ARE A VERY INTERESTING AND INSPIRATIONAL WRITER! Congratulations on your well deserved win!

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 6/20/2012 8:56:00 AM

Wow Susan! So few words but definitely leaves an impact! I certainly enjoyed your metaphor here I think it's very unique using a bubble gum dispenser! Super congrats on your win :D!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 6/20/2012 6:58:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Chris' "Be Yourself" contest Susan. Love, Carol

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/13/2012 11:13:00 AM

...lol...I sit and wonder how on earth did you get this unique "bubble" idea B.E.Susan. Well done - like it a lot. - Have a colorfull bubble day. - oxox love and smile from Anne-Lise

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 6/13/2012 7:49:00 AM

well that would certainly burst my bubble! cool write. Black eyed Susan. Thanks for your comment.

Richard Palmer

Date: 6/13/2012 6:01:00 AM

ha ha ha ,love it,gum talk,nice write B.Eyed.S

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/12/2012 9:40:00 PM

What great imagery, Susan. You are so clever with these short ones that you write! Love how you used Eye for I!! How is it going?

Russell Sivey

Date: 6/12/2012 10:38:00 AM

What a intense write stating exactly what is on your mind! I really enjoyed the moving piece Susan! I believe you said just what you wanted to say and did so masterfully! Great Work!!