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Pop

He fills me 
Like a supermarket
Bubble gum dispenser
With black eyes
Of condescension
Give me a dime
Eye will give you

A glance 

That will POP
Your bubble


6/12/12

Copyright © Black Eyed Susan | Year Posted 2012

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 7/7/2013 10:21:00 AM A great Free -for-all winning poem. *CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome winning write. have a great day, TA TA TA * Linda Login to Reply

S.Jagathsimhan Nair Date: 7/7/2013 12:31:00 AM Congrats, Susan, it's great poetry!! Login to Reply

Skat A Date: 7/3/2013 11:54:00 PM awesome............. SKAT Login to Reply

Karen Anglesey Date: 7/3/2013 7:22:00 PM Susan, witty and seductive... very original and creative. Congrats on your win :) Login to Reply

Connie Gildersleeve Date: 7/3/2013 6:22:00 PM Congratulations on your well deserve win. Wow, edgy and to the point, powerful write Sue. Warm Smiles, Connie Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/3/2013 5:27:00 PM wow, Susan, check this out, you are a top winner among only six top tens!! Congrats. Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 2/7/2013 10:33:00 AM goes the weasel ..pd Login to Reply

Nick Bagnall Date: 7/12/2012 5:48:00 AM odd, I like that she only gives a glance, like he's relly not worth looking at, interesting. Login to Reply

Kathryn Collins Date: 6/22/2012 7:20:00 AM Susan for all those full of themselves baboons. Perfect. love, Kathy Login to Reply

David Williams Date: 6/22/2012 1:10:00 AM Susan congrats on your win..David Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/20/2012 9:06:00 PM Awesome to see you on this list. I got on the other list of his. not this one. BIG congrats, Susan. I love this one too. Login to Reply

Gwendolen Song Date: 6/20/2012 3:15:00 PM Intense tho'ts....evil-lurking in his lust-filled eyes....whoa. Great analogy to bubble gum bc it's pretty cheap too! Congrats on your win, Susan. :) Gwendolen Login to Reply

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl Date: 6/20/2012 12:05:00 PM Congratulations on your winning place xx Login to Reply

Elliott Bowe The Drunken Poet Date: 6/20/2012 10:25:00 AM LOL,YOU ARE A VERY INTERESTING AND INSPIRATIONAL WRITER! Congratulations on your well deserved win! Login to Reply

Kabuteng P.Ink K. Date: 6/20/2012 8:56:00 AM Wow Susan! So few words but definitely leaves an impact! I certainly enjoyed your metaphor here I think it's very unique using a bubble gum dispenser! Super congrats on your win :D! Login to Reply

Carol Sunshine Brown Date: 6/20/2012 6:58:00 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win in Chris' "Be Yourself" contest Susan. Love, Carol Login to Reply

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 6/13/2012 11:13:00 AM ...lol...I sit and wonder how on earth did you get this unique "bubble" idea B.E.Susan. Well done - like it a lot. - Have a colorfull bubble day. - oxox love and smile from Anne-Lise Login to Reply

Robert A. Dufresne Date: 6/13/2012 7:49:00 AM well that would certainly burst my bubble! cool write. Black eyed Susan. Thanks for your comment. Login to Reply

Richard Palmer Date: 6/13/2012 6:01:00 AM ha ha ha ,love it,gum talk,nice write B.Eyed.S Login to Reply

Andrea Dietrich Date: 6/12/2012 9:40:00 PM What great imagery, Susan. You are so clever with these short ones that you write! Love how you used Eye for I!! How is it going? Login to Reply

Russell Sivey Date: 6/12/2012 10:38:00 AM What a intense write stating exactly what is on your mind! I really enjoyed the moving piece Susan! I believe you said just what you wanted to say and did so masterfully! Great Work!! Login to Reply