Pop

He fills me 
Like a supermarket
Bubble gum dispenser
With black eyes
Of condescension
Give me a dime
Eye will give you

A glance 

That will POP
Your bubble


6/12/12
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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A   Avatar
July 7, 2013 at 10:21 AM
A great Free -for-all winning poem. *CONGRATULATIONS!!! With your awesome winning write. have a great day, TA TA TA * Linda
Nair Avatar
July 7, 2013 at 12:31 AM
Congrats, Susan, it's great poetry!!
A  Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 11:54 PM
awesome............. SKAT
Anglesey Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 7:22 PM
Susan, witty and seductive... very original and creative. Congrats on your win :)
Gildersleeve Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 6:22 PM
Congratulations on your well deserve win. Wow, edgy and to the point, powerful write Sue. Warm Smiles, Connie
Dietrich Avatar
July 3, 2013 at 5:27 PM
wow, Susan, check this out, you are a top winner among only six top tens!! Congrats.
A   Avatar
February 7, 2013 at 10:33 AM
goes the weasel ..pd
Bagnall Avatar
July 12, 2012 at 5:48 AM
odd, I like that she only gives a glance, like he's relly not worth looking at, interesting.
Collins Avatar
June 22, 2012 at 7:20 AM
Susan for all those full of themselves baboons. Perfect. love, Kathy
Williams Avatar
June 22, 2012 at 1:10 AM
Susan congrats on your win..David
Dietrich Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 9:06 PM
Awesome to see you on this list. I got on the other list of his. not this one. BIG congrats, Susan. I love this one too.
Song Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 3:15 PM
Intense tho'ts....evil-lurking in his lust-filled eyes....whoa. Great analogy to bubble gum bc it's pretty cheap too! Congrats on your win, Susan. :) Gwendolen
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 12:05 PM
Congratulations on your winning place xx
The Drunken Poet Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 10:25 AM
LOL,YOU ARE A VERY INTERESTING AND INSPIRATIONAL WRITER! Congratulations on your well deserved win!
K. Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 8:56 AM
Wow Susan! So few words but definitely leaves an impact! I certainly enjoyed your metaphor here I think it's very unique using a bubble gum dispenser! Super congrats on your win :D!
Brown Avatar
June 20, 2012 at 6:58 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in Chris' "Be Yourself" contest Susan. Love, Carol
Andresen Avatar
June 13, 2012 at 11:13 AM
...lol...I sit and wonder how on earth did you get this unique "bubble" idea B.E.Susan. Well done - like it a lot. - Have a colorfull bubble day. - oxox love and smile from Anne-Lise
Dufresne Avatar
June 13, 2012 at 7:49 AM
well that would certainly burst my bubble! cool write. Black eyed Susan. Thanks for your comment.
Palmer Avatar
June 13, 2012 at 6:01 AM
ha ha ha ,love it,gum talk,nice write B.Eyed.S
Dietrich Avatar
June 12, 2012 at 9:40 PM
What great imagery, Susan. You are so clever with these short ones that you write! Love how you used Eye for I!! How is it going?
Sivey Avatar
June 12, 2012 at 10:38 AM
What a intense write stating exactly what is on your mind! I really enjoyed the moving piece Susan! I believe you said just what you wanted to say and did so masterfully! Great Work!!
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